Legacy here for a review.
You have a very simple rhyme pattern, but it does look like you have broken it in the 3rd stanza where fight, girl, and wrists do not rhyme. I believe that if you establish a rhyme pattern, then you should stick to it; but it is not essential to have a rhyme pattern in a poem. That one stanza broke up your poem and made it awkward. I would change the wording there, or even take it out. It doesn't take away in my opinion if it was to be gone.
Other than that nitpick, everything else is good with the poem. I just hope that if you are feeling suicidal that you reach out to someone; a professional, a friend, parent, or trusted adult. The US suicide hotline number is 1-800-273-8255 or text CONNECT to 741741.
Legacy out (from their hole of hiding).
Points: 402
Reviews: 145
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