Young Writers Society

Hello there PoTatOe001

I am Kostia and I will give you my opinion on this.

First of all it is very strong and moving. It contains deep emotions and powerful statements. I really liked it and it made me feel all those things you described while reading it. I believe it is good to get those things out of your chest now and then. It seemed to me like it was a deeply personal piece so respect for getting it out there, I know it is not easy.

If you want my personal opinion you should get the strength to say this to her face since you deserve to be heard and she deserves to know how you feel no matter how hurtful it might be. So if you ever get the chance I strongly recomend you do that.

Thank you for posting this and shared your thoughts and emotions. I really appreciate it!

Keep writing!

Kostia

Hey, Cyr here with the message that I get it. Not on quite this level, but I get it and I'm proud that you were able to speak out, even if it was under a mask. I know what it's like to have a shitty parental figure (see: either of my potential dad's) and I'm really glad that someone else had this kind of experience. Like, I know it happens, but hearing about it from some anonymous source like a vague whisper of flippant comfort isn't even close to hearing it from someone who actually knows, so thank you.

Hello PoTatOe!

When I read this I could tell the emotions in it right away. It kind of reminds me of something you would put in a song to tell that person how you feel.

There doesn't seem to be any grammar mistakes. There is one technically not sentence cause it is to short to be but either than that it looks good.

I hope to read more of your writings!

Keep up the good work!

Sincerely Anma