I find myself quite good
At putting on a facade
That no one understood
Many find it quite odd.
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“Be open with your feelings!”
They said
“But that is not appealing”
I protested.
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So, I put on a smile,
Bright and wide
Hoping it lasts a while
Until everyone is satisfied.
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relatable poem. short, but i can still very much relate. it gets tiring putting on a smile but then again…some people either do not notice or do not understand. i’ve personally been doing it for a while…
i suggest a few fixes with the poem (like someone else said, it is too short) but other than that i find it interesting. good job.
Thank you for your feedback
I question if people actually mean it when they ask you to show your real feelings.Sometimes,they’ll tell you to stop feeling a certain way because it isn’t “appropriate” and other times they are genuine.But I can see why you would put on a mask.I think many people have gotten used to fake smiles for society and that’s a problem.I hope that you have a fun and cool day and night.
That is interesting input and exactly what I was going for! Society has made it so that we almost feel uncomfortable when saying how we truly feel. Saying "I am fine" is almost an easy way out. <3
I believe that I can relate to this poem. Anyone could. Sometimes, you just want to keep your feelings to yourself. You believe that some things are better unsaid. You have secrets that you want to keep or just some feelings bottled up. But sometimes, that's not healthy. Sometimes, you just need to spill everything to someone, whether it'd be a friend or a family member.
Anyway, the only flaw I see is how short the poem is. I feel like it should have at least one more stanza. But that's just me. I wish you well on your writing endeavors!
Leslie
Thank you so much for this kind review!
No problem!