He was tall
Like the mountains
And she was not small
She was 5'3 and counting
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His eyes were the color of the raging sea
Her's were the color of honey
She sought to travel free
And he wanted only money
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The two were polar opposites
Like and fire and ice
She was full of confidence
And he always thought twice
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Though, you'd never see it
Not with a naked eye
There is a fire lit
In both of their hearts, you know what I imply
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There's love between them
You'd never see with a naked eye
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Hey there!!!!
Its a beautiful poem to believe that opposites attract and fall in love ......Your poem almost surely instils trust in true love between opposites and defies the fact that being opposite do means being incompatible ....Overall its a fun and loving poem to read which is well decorated with the nature imageries and metaphors like raging sea and tall mountains and fire and ice ...
It also offers to inform readers that true love between opposites is tricky and hard to detect with our naked eyes intending that sometimes what is shown isn't exactly what the matter is ....its way deeper and passionate than that...
Well done!!!!
Thank you so much for this kind review!
Nice concept
I really enjoyed it x
I'm glad!
Hey there, Icy stopping by for a quick review
I like that you've used a lot of nature imagery throughout this, it helps tie the different stanzas together. I think in some places the imagery could be stronger though, for instance the raging sea was particularly powerful - the adjective makes it flow together so well. Maybe that's something that could be applied to the ice and fire too?
You also switch tenses as you continue throughout the poem. I'm not sure if that was intentional, but I found it a little jarring, especially as there doesn't seem to be a clear reason for it?
Overall though, an enjoyable read - thanks for sharing
Thank you so much for your review
It flowed and then it didn’t but then it did. Overall I liked it the message is cute we love a polar opposite trope!!
Thank you