This is part of a current wip collection//journal entries
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I like the sun. The fidgeting, always dancing leaves.
How the beetle lays upon the perfect, quaintest corner to
adore the sun and rest in its desires.
Love, the very thing that builds up everything;
Can we portray it as just one?
Frankly never, no.
To love, as if out of pure nature.
Like the pollen and the bees, the two intertwine
in a tango of symbiotic life.
From leeches to curing diseases,
The creation from love.
To exist, to be, is to love.
The tenderest of giants,
lays their palm against my face.
Burning, a fiery passion,
blooming through my skin. How simple is it,
To embrace the so[u]l, basking in its
Mightful glare.
Love, love is the softness in the ground.
The tranquil treasure of the stars.
Sol [Root] - “Sun” “Alone” “Only”
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This is so sweet! And full of life! I also love the sun but sometimes it gets too warm lol. Love the way you described leaves. It makes me imagine a sunny day with a nice, warm wind! I love that kind of weather. Not too cold, not too hot! And yeah I feel that beetle. Would do the same haha! You gave this beetle humanity! And yes! We can't really portray love as just one. And woah.. the description of love.. so romantic! "Like the pollen ams the bees, the two interwine/in a tango of symbiotic life" I am in love with this quote.. "to exist, to be, is to love" EXCUSE ME, HELLO SHEAKSPEAR? And then the litlle descriptions of "simple" stuff.. so beautiful! Your poem has a bright soul and it made my day warmer! Great job, keep it up!
:'D thank you so much for reading my journal! It's so great to see someone connect with the atmosphere within, and that you found a quote that you could take for yourself from it!!! You are amazing <3 Thank you for shining!!
Thank you! And no problem!
Hi! This came out like one minute ago...wanted to review it lol. It's me, CATS!!! Since you reviewed my poem, I decided to return the favor. Let's start!
This part is very good.
First, a journal entry is very creative and I love the font.
1ST PARAGRAPH: I love the sun too. It's so warm and gives me a happy feeling. I love how you gave humanlike qualities to the leaves too! The beetle is at peace.
2ND PARAGRAPH: Love is nice. Like how you included a question in there.
3RD PARAGRAPH: Did you intentionally make bees and disease rhyme? Cause it is great!
4TH PARAGRAPH LINE: To exist, to be, is to love. I feel like it could be a famous quote someday. Maybe it already is (XD)
5TH PARAGRAPH: Giants? Who are the giants? I'm curious to know. Great details there.
6TH PARAGRAPH: The description of the sun gives off it's radiant energy and warmth. The line, 'A fiery passion' sets off a wave of fire in my mind. Overall my favorite line!
7TH PARAGRAPH: Like how you compared the love to softness of the earth. It really sets the scene, you know? 'The tranquil treasure of the stars' wow. You certainly have great description!
OVERALL: I think for a first, that your writing is great. Keep exploring different ways, and I am excited for more! Happy Writing, my new friend!
Love,
CATS
:') this is so sweet!! Thank you so much Cats for this beautiful review. I'm glad you could intertwine yourself into the comfort of the sun! The great giant haha is actually just that, the sun around us, the skies, the galaxy that engulfs us! You are amazing!! Thank you for your kind words <3
No problem! thanks for specifying who the giants were.