The earth, the stars, moon and sun,
everything,
everything travels through the wormhole
to another spacetime dimension.
This is continuous process
that never stops, no it never ceases.
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Not even the fastest can run
or cowards can turn
their backs and go back.
Every direction leads to the ultimate pool of nothingness.
-----
Things become still, well
though nothing ever gets destroyed
in it but neither they live nor they die.
But rather keep hanging as if from a string.
Even that theory of everything
can not explain the reason
why any of this happens
because the truth is beyond the reach of humans.
Yet the hopes
are alive within our hearts that someday we'll come to know
the deep dark secrets of
the Black Holes.
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Nice, flowy, realistic. I like how it talks about the Earth.
truth is beyond the reach of humans.
Yet the hopes
are alive within our hearts that someday we'll come to know
the deep dark secrets of
the Black Holes.
-Nice sentence,paragraph.
good job!
hello ,i'm here to review, well i realy liked your work , the theme was intresting , the
words , the presentation , it's simple , but meaningful .
I liked how you started it...so beautiful
The earth, the stars, moon and sun,
everything,
everything travels through the wormhole
to another spacetime dimension.
This is continuous process
that never stops, no it never ceases.
so keep writing
Thanks a lot, dear "smile" !!
<3
Hai there! AlexSushiDog here to review your poem!
) I really liked the concept of it to the fact that we know nothing of the black hole, I really like that you chose to write about something unique and fresh!
To start with, I really liked the loneliness and mystery you portrayed in this poem; it had a very good rhythm except at some bits which I will nitpick later (Not now, I like to start positive
Just a few pointers:
1.You seemed to miss out the Capital letters at the start of each line.
2.You seem to cut up some lines into 2 lines needlessly like this one:
Besides those points, this is amazing! The problems are mainly grammatical not with the actual concept so if you just iron those down this will be perfect!
Alex out, beep.
Thanks mate !
For the record, I like your username...and my pet fish's name is "Sushi"
Don't tell the fish what sushi means...
Haha, a'right
It feels nice to be the first to review new works...
...especially since I'm passing the time while waiting for the bell to ring...
Anyways...
I liked this. It really made me think: What's really inside a black hole?
And us being humans; beings that strive for knowledge; we'll probably figure it out soon.
Keep up the good work.
Thank you !
I'm glad you liked it ^_^
~MarS