Young Writers Society

This piece is really beautiful. The atmosphere and quality of the writing is engrossing. The writing is very well done, and I really enjoyed reading this.

I'm going to be honest, this piece really confused me. I have no idea what it means. I don't think I'm smart enough too, honestly. Maybe this the effect you wanted, to keep everything shrouded in mystery, to leave it up to the readers interpretation.

Maybe it's about a man passing through a place at the edge of the universe where the people who are hiding from something or other reside. The people there are convinced that he is their savior, but he is not. He eventually leaves.

That was probably a terrible try at trying to figure it out.

Despite the shrouded meaning, this piece was just beautiful. I honestly don't even care that I didn't understand it. The language you use was stunning, and I'm just really glad I got to read it. Please keep writing!

ella

Thanks for sharing this enigmatic short story written in a thought-provoking, pensive and somber mood. As a reader I enjoyed the story's tone. I am also very impressed by your command of imagery.

But as far as meaning, all i could derive was that there is someone who is expected to leave an assembly-line job and that his fellow workers, who are obviously greatly distressed by his behavior, will be greatly relieved when he does so.

I’m sure that there is a deeper meaning but it is simply too cryptic for me to merge into one coherent message. Many unexplained statements left to be pondered. If this was the intended effect, then the story succeeded. Despite this, I consider it a true work of art. Some short stories are like that. Their value and beauty is in the overall effect.