Hi Koino! I hope its okay I shortened your user!
Your poem is very beautiful and I enjoyed reading it very much. There are a few things I would like to point out though. First off, I think the capitalization of every sentence is misleading, there is no punctuation but capitalization of every line and that can make it harder to read. Try adding in commas, or periods to make full sentences and only capitalize the first letter! Other than that it is a great read! Love is a scary thing! I really enjoy "and the only way / to survive is to dive", that is beautiful! Sometimes we just got to dive head first into the things that frighten us, in order to overcome it. Great job and keep writing!
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