Hey there! Late welcome to YWS!
This definitely had some Edgar Allan Poe vibes - the imagery was difficult to read through, since it was quite gruesome! I'm not sure that the image culminated in enough new meaning; like I couldn't quite tell if the speaker was a murderer, a love-interest, or just obsessed - which really gave the poem an uncomfortable twist but also as a reader left me unknowing as to what the point was supposed to be from the piece.
You might consider dropping a higher rating on the piece because even if it's only implied violence, it's fairly disturbing. There's not a lot of horror-poetry on the site, so kudos to you for trying something unique! Will be interested to read your other stuff - my main suggestion would be to have a little bit clearer purpose in the writing, so that the reader really comes away with some sort of clear sense on what the piece meant.
Happy writing!
alliyah
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