Young Writers Society

That was truly touching and realistic. All muslims are stereotyped immensely, and you have shown that from an innocent child's eyes. People don't understand that if terrorists are Muslims, not all Muslims are terrorists. Every word in the poem struck me. You have written it in a simple language yet it conveys such a heavy meaning. This problem of judging on the basis of religion is a major one and you have put light on it. My favourite parts:
" I guess some people don't understand what hatred can do to a child."
"Now I don't see it the same."
"My days of carelessness and freedom turned to fear."
"Why are people so scared of a religion?"

This hits home right here. Absolutely heartbreakingly beautiful. I adore that you chose to keep it simple and not override the message with unnecessary filler such as intricate vocabulary when not needed, etc. This poem is definitely a winner in my eyes.

Usually, I don't like it when there's a lack of puncutation, but here it works. It comes off as a soliloquy or a train of thought. It adds a strange flow that works with the emotions behind the words.

I am a bit picky when I say I don't like all the capitalization, but that might just be a preference. So you can ignore that if you like it better that way.

My favorite parts:

At one point in my life I

Dreamed

Of the days when I would wear my

Hijab

Now I don’t see it the same

I feel

ashamed

When you say childhood

I think of

When I learned that people are

Rude

Uneducated

Self centered

Careless

Insensitive

Racist

Violent

Hey! I'm gonna try to review this thing.

I don't know what it's like to be Muslim in America. So I hadn't really examined that perspective before. But this poem shows what it's like, or at least a bit of it. It shows your experience. And I think the way you show it through this poem is well done.

The poem transitions from happy, ignorant childhood memories to the harsh reality of discrimination... and that transition is delivered really well. I can vividly see the person who you are describing: their likes, their interests, their struggles, their feelings. When I read this poem, I watch this person grow and transition with the words, and I felt every word. That especially goes for the last parts of this poem, with the lines growing shorter, chopping to one word, emphasizing emotions, actions, feelings. Contrasting with the beginning of the poem, the words hit harder, each broken line a stamp into the beating heart of the reader, an imprint into the reader's brain. In that respect, well done.

I also like the repetition of the line, "When you say childhood." It brings ideas together, and as more ideas and feelings are introduced, more layers are added onto that phrase's meaning. It doesn't seem to be repeated often, and maybe if you repeated it more often between ideas, it might be able to pull together more ideas and solidify that repetition. It just might bring the repeating of that line more to light. But of course, that is completely up to you. Your story, your poem, right?

One typo:

But

I guess

Others

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Have ruined it

This is heartbreaking <333