Sometimes it’s hard to look at who I’ve become
Surely that couldn’t be me
Impossible that I have become
Such a vicious
Ruthless
Teeth baring
Blood hungry
Monster
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All of my own invention
Laughing behind backs
Unironically rude through innocent faces
Lying for the reward of attention
Walking upon others by
Stepping up the stairs of social status
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And to cover my tracks,
Fountains of excuses present:
I didn’t know what I was saying
I never understood
I thought that’s what you wanted
That was in the past
I’ve changed
I’m different now
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Oh, no
I’m exactly the same
No, that’s not right
I’m worse
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Sometimes it’s hard to look at who I’ve become
Surely that couldn’t be me
Impossible that I have become
Such a self hating
Violent
Graphic
Machine of destruction
Running purely off of my
Unquenchable
Hatred
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Flinching when a memory surfaces
Screaming at the reflection in the mirror
An inanimate object, yet all me
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Self depreciation can take many forms
For me, it was, is, physical
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So strange, to see the person I have become
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To know that the little girl
Who ran freely through
Acres of dead leaves and fallen trees
Without any care beyond that of the present
Would become
The girl who smiles a little too hard in public
Pushes the pins into her skin
A little too hard in private
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The girl who once fainted at the sight of blood
Craves it all hours of the day
Wishing to see it run from her body
In copious amounts
But is much too coward to finish the job
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Sometimes it’s hard to accept the person I have become
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Hey-o, frogforest! I immediately clicked onto your poem after I saw the trigger warning! I thought it'd be nice to leave a review!
These lines often show people how much they've changed over time and how they think they shouldn't be like this and expect to change again yet they don't know that this change is needed, that it's their own character development. No matter how wrong or how right it is. I really relate to this up to this day, I'd look in the mirror or tell my closest friends how much I miss my old self before, and they'd always say that this is for the best because it isn't wrong, nothing ever is.
I didn't understand this line. Yet I think that invention means someone's actions, things that they did? The more that I read, that's how I came up with that!
This is where I really made up the intention of the hidden meaning of the word "intention" in your poem. How people judge your actions behind your backs really sucks. The way they would do anything just to be popular. The demands they take and everything they do.
THIS IS WHERE I ABSOLUTELY LOVED THIS POEM. THE LAST THREE LINES OF THIS PARAGRAPH TOOK ME! How someone changes and realizes everything people did to them and how they know how to stop them now is real character development. I absolutely adore this.
Idk why, but now I think this is the most relatable poem I have ever read... ;-; oh my god.
This is the most vulnerable paragraph in the poem in my opinion. It really shows how someone can be so weak in private and yet try her best to be strong outside and be cool with everything that they do.
The last line is the dessert of this poem. I love how you ended it with that line. It completes and made me feel. Thank you for this gorgeous poem, it really made my day honestly.
Keep writing!! I'll be reading! <333
first i would say i love this poem because its like a little story about mental health. I really didn't like when you were trying to compare yourself to a monster. I didn't really like the last part when you said
"The girl who once fainted at the sight of blood" I think you could of replaced that with something else.
But my favorite part was when you went on to talk about your reflection in the mirror.when you said
" linching when a memory surfaces
Screaming at the reflection in the mirror
An inanimate object, yet all me"
Some parts wasn't as clear to me as others also.
But other than that it was a really good poem.
Great job-Jason20
I didn't find anything wrong with her poem I think she did perfectly fine.
She does give you a warning at the beginning saying all this was going to be in this poem
Thanks both of you guys!
I really did like this it kind of reminded me of I can't Escape(you should go check it out)
It's a series I'm thinking about doing it's going to be about mental health and how important it is. But I really love the part when you said "The girl who smiles a little too hard in public
Pushes the pins into her skin
A little too hard in private"
That part was really interesting. I also think this is relatable in certain parts. I'm personally can relate to this poem. Most of it some of it I'm trying not to become. We all at a certain point become something we don't like physically and mentally. That's why I came to read this poem because of your title i. I liked how it was describing how she didn't like it and how she used to be happy and how she was scared to finish the job.
Keep up the good work-BrokenHeartAri🖤
Thanksss