Young Writers Society

That was a very touching poem. I was very relatable too. I just completed my 9th grade and, even though it was completely online, I can relate a bit. At times I have felt like what I am is not normal, I am very weird and no one wants to be friends with me. But my friends accepted me for who I am, I feel free with them. Teenage is when you feel like being popular and impressing everyone, but I have been told I will soon learn how to cope with it. You have given a valuable lesson to every teenager through this poem. It tells you how you can lose everything just by wanting to become popular. You can use yourself too. I loved how you used repetition to put emphasis in certain important parts. I think all teenagers should read this poem and understand the value of true friends..

In 9th grade, I was just a regular girl with a lot of friends, and then when I came back to school the next year I had fewer friends and then I made new friends but my popularity changed. it was like I was a different person. I wasn't the same anymore. I even struggled with fitting in during class. then I started acting out and just getting into trouble all the time. you need to put yourself in a good friend group and also be open-minded to changes. another thing that comes along is relationships whether they be intimate or no they are very hard to deal with. I struggled with a lot of things after I broke up with my first boyfriend.

Heya!
This is my on Young Writer's Society at 7 pm because I can't think of anything else to do... but anyway

This is a beautiful poem - it covers everything that's real about popularity and its effect on people. The "a strange thing called popularity" bit that you repeat punches hard every time.

It's STRANGE (pun intended) how great this poem is - usually, I don't like rhymed lines in poems, but in this one, whenever it showed up I sat at the edge of my seat and waited for another one. This poem seemed like a story - and obviously, it is a story, but it seemed like I was reading a 500 - page novel in one sitting. XD

The first time I've read a 500 page novel in one sitting *ahem* School for Good and Evil *ahem*...

The only thing I would change AT ALL would be the order. Instead of introducing the poem with those first two stanzas, make the third stanza the first one and just add a line to the beginning such as "I used to have friends". Those 1st and second stanzas could be moved more toward the middle, or maybe even toward the end if that's more your style.

Thank you for gracing us all with this beautiful poem. I enjoyed reading it and writing a review. Hopefully, this was helpful!

Have a good day, night, morning, evening, whatever it is for you when you read this!

Peace,

Myre

Wow!
This is a great poem - you definitely show how popularity isn't always as fantastic as people think it is - which in fact links to my own YA contemporary quartet that I'm working on ("Reflections" - check out my excerpts for The Other Side if you get a chance). I love your language and imagery, you feel as though that you're right there next to your character who's experincing what popularity really is - how it can make someone become superficial so well done, you should be proud of this. Honestly, I have no suggestions for improvement, its a fantastically crafted poem that you should share around as much as you can. You definitely show a vast amount of potential as a writer so please keep writing!

This is so heart-warming, the repetition was effective and beautiful and the theme of the poem is so true. Unfortunately, we live in a world where people push others down. If this is your real experience, I just want to say that it's never too late to be yourself or to apologise.
I loved the lines 'beating and bloody, pulsing and alive' because it's been written with such clarity and to reference it to this situation makes it seem like everything that made you the person you are, made you alive and breathing, was ripped away from you. It's open to interpretation to what this would then mean for you.

I enjoyed reading this poem, it's so effective. I hope everything turns out okay for you

It is such a beautiful poetry! The way you described popularity is awesome. And your repetition of those three lines is also awesome.

Overall, it's a thought provoking, realistic, literary poetry work. Whatever, I hope I was able to provide a good review. Your work is really beautifully crafted- it shows the effect of popularity in our everyday lives.

Thanks for giving me the opportunity to read such a beautiful work.