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The many winding paths of Grasscove, USA: Part Five

*This story is underneath my folder titled “Grasscove, USA”. Gacha Club character designs are under this forum: https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?f=27&t=116005&start=1335. Enjoy!*

We’ve been walking in the hotel for hours and haven’t found anything supernatural. No ghosts except for Ophelia, no vampires except for Emery and Lilliana. I think that maybe we should get out of here and-

“Let’s split up.” Emery says.

I’m sorry, did he just suggest that we split up? In a haunted hotel? In this circumstance? How is splitting up going to help us?

“Maybe we’ll find something if we’re not all with together. I’ll stay with Ophelia and you and Lilliana can go on your own ways.”

In the quick blur that is vampire speed, Emery disappears into a dark hallway, Ophelia following after him. I’m left alone with Lilliana again. I glance at her blue-gray eyes and feel my neck burn where her teeth grazed it.

We don’t need to talk about that.

“So where do you want to-Lilliana?!”

Lilliana just took off without a word and left me here, alone in the unlit hallway. I’m not too mad about it, I just wish that she said something.

I guess I’ll catch up with her.

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I’m not sure where to look. I don’t think there is anything else here in this hotel. The only thing I hear is my own footsteps and when I look into the rooms, I don’t see or hear anything out of the ordinary. I try to listen for quiet whispers, like when Ophelia spoke to me and Lilliana years ago, but I hear nothing.

Which is odd, because I used to think I could hear all kinds of ghostly whispers as a little kid. I thought I could see and talk to ghosts like a character in a movie, like somebody more than what I am. I thought that I couldn’t have possibly imagined something like that.

Obviously I was wrong, but why do I care? It’s not a big deal and yet I can’t help but feel a little sad about it. It’s almost like I don’t deserve to see ghosts as much as I did as a child, like I’m not worth it anymore. That’s probably not what it is at all, but that’s how I feel. I miss being able to see the magic in stuff. I miss feeling special and intuitive.

I think I should just sit down and take a break. I’ll find the others later. I just need to be alone for a bit. Yeah, that’s it.

I walk into the first room I see and sit on the white bed, taking in all of the details. I like to look at how rooms are made. It’s nice to imagine who lived and dreamed in them, because if I do that, then I can detach myself from the present by thinking of the past. It sounds bad but it feels comforting to me.

This is a hotel, but it’s not a modern hotel, so there is still some difference the rooms have from each other. There’s the same dark green paint and white lace curtains that are in all of the rooms, but there is a music box and dolls on the shelves. In the closet, I see small, frilly dresses with many bows and layers, lines of Mary Janes, boots, and buckle shoes underneath the dresses. On the nightstand next to the bed, there is a dusty white hand mirror with many pearls and engravings on the handle. Behind it is a gramophone, the golden horn blooming out of the wooden box like a flower.

This could have been Ophelia’s room, but it can’t be, because if she’s Emery’s sister, then she died in the 1600s. Maybe before that. Gramophones were invented in the 1800s and only the wealthy had hand mirrors in the 1600s.

Or Emery could have stolen the mirror for her. He was a cowboy, after all. He could have done lots of things that history couldn’t find out. And the gramophone could have been put there long after most of the Lathom family died and Emery became a vampire.

Either way, it’s a nice room. I like it. It feels like a secluded escape from the strangeness of reality, minus the dolls. It’d be better without the dolls’ glass eyes staring at me. But that is just one small thing. Other than that, the room is perfect.

I think Lenora would like the room the way it is. She liked dolls and girly things. Even at twelve years old, she still had the dolls her Grandma gave her. Whenever I went to Lilliana’s house, Lenora would be on her phone, scrolling through videos on social media. She’d eat and scroll if it was time to eat. She wouldn’t make eye contact with anyone and would not stay out for long, because after she was done hanging around us, she’d go upstairs to her room and talk to her dolls. We could hear her from downstairs. I thought she was talking to friends at first but Lilliana told me that she didn’t have any. She only had her dolls.

That’s why when Lenora went missing back in spring, nobody but Lilliana and their parents cared to put up missing posters around town and look for her. I don’t think a lot of people liked her much. I think they thought that she was “spoiled” and “careless” and that she “deserved to go missing”. I think they cared a little too much about how she acted. I know that she probably didn’t care about me much, but I think I understand her. I think she just didn’t trust people enough to talk about her thoughts and feelings. I think she found comfort in her dolls. I don’t blame her, with all of the stuff people assumed and said about her.

I would have helped Lilliana, but my family was on vacation to some brighter, tropical place at the time and I only got news of what happened through her texts.

Lenora didn’t even go anywhere. She just wasn’t found in her bed. She was taken…taken like how Ophelia was.

But we found Ophelia’s ghost! Lenora is still missing. Maybe it’s not too late yet.

There’s a doll on the bed, with sandy blond hair tied in two braids by murky green bows, freckles sprinkled all over her face, around her gray-green eyes. She’s wearing a green and orange plaid dress that has sunflowers as buttons and white tights and white Mary Janes on her feet. She is not smiling. Not even a hint of a smile, just a droop of the lips. Out of all the dolls here, I think she freaks me out the most. There’s something about her face…her lips…that looks off-putting and frightening…like a monster in hidden form.

I pick her up. Her stomach feels hard. Like there’s something inside of it. It’s too hard, not the material of a doll.

I lift her dress up. There’s a hole in her stomach, where a shellac disk record is. I’m not sure how a shellac disk record was able to fit in this doll, but it’s there.

I gently take the record out of the doll and put it in the record player, placing the handle on top of the record and letting it play.

There’s a banjo playing and a young man with a southern accent singing mournfully. I cannot make out what the lyrics are. The record is too scratchy for me to understand anything. Maybe the disk was cut to fit the doll and that’s why it’s unintelligible. Maybe it’s just old. But I think it’s a longing love song from how he’s singing it, from how the tune melds with his words.

That’s another thing. I listen to all kinds of songs in my free time, old and new. I feel like I’d know what this song is, but I don’t. It might be a song I haven’t ever discovered, but I don’t think I know who the guy singing this is. It feels like this song isn’t from here. Not that it’s from a different country, just that it’s not from Earth period. But it sounds like it’s from Earth. Maybe I’m overthinking this. I’m totally overthinking this. I-

“LEFT HER FOR DEAD!”

I jump further into the bed. The lyrics had suddenly screamed out before fading into scratches. I didn’t expect it. I need to calm down. Let my nerves rest.

I breathe, in and out, in and out, in and out…nope, I’m not calm. A little bit better, but still scared.

I reach out towards the record player and remove the handle. I grab the record and put it back in the doll.

This doll isn’t normal. That has already been established. This doll is disturbing.

Which is exactly why I need to take her with me. This could be the paranormal thing that we’re looking for, the thing that could help us! Even if she isn’t, I’ll give her to Lilliana. All dolls mortify me, but I think Lilliana will appreciate something that reminds her of her sister. I don’t think the scratchy record will bother her as much as it did with me, because I could just be overly paranoid over the wrong things. I’m told by my parents that I need to work on my reactions. Whatever that means.

If she is scared, I’ll take the disk and destroy it. I don’t want her to be scared. But I can’t leave this doll behind.

I hold the doll in my hand and walk out.

*This is the doll Elizabeth is holding:



*The actual doll does not have a record in her stomach, that came from a dream I had about her and decided to put in this story.*

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I'll be reviewing this and the 6th part tomorrow, sorry for the long wait. But I'm excited to check out how the series has developed!

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Tikaya
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Tikaya wrote a review · Mon Jun 01, 2026 7:01 am

Good morning!

I like how the narration immediately says “yeah there was no supernatural stuff, except for, you known, the usual” XD

Okay, the reasons for splitting up, and especially for Lilliana leaving her behind… are quite suspicious…

Awww ☹ “I miss being able to see the magic in stuff. I miss feeling special and intuitive.” Feels like a metaphor to growing up. But! Life is exactly as special as you make it for yourself, so there is still hope!

The word choices in this sentence are a bit awkward: “This could have been Ophelia’s room, but it can’t be,“ even tho I know what you mean maybe a different phrasing wouldn’t make it look as if you’re contradicting yourself?

“history couldn’t find out“ Don’t you mean historians?

I like her insights into Lenora, that was very well described.

It’s impressive that there is any sound at all coming from the record player, after all this time! Wonder if this is something supernatural, too?

Awww I like that especially because the doll is so creepy, that she’s like “yep this is part of the supernatural, must swallow fear and investigate!”

Love that you included the doll’s picture. She doesn’t look that creepy but hey in an abandoned hotel, anything goes @.…@

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Hey there, creeper! It's been a while, huh? Anyways, this is Alex, back with a review on this series. I know I was supposed to get this done yesterday but things came up, sorry for the delay. Let's hope this ends up being worth the wait!

I’m sorry, did he just suggest that we split up? In a haunted hotel? In this circumstance? How is splitting up going to help us?


Lol, I forgot how much I loved this very realistic narration XD
For what it's worth, I agree with Elizabeth here. Lilliana and Emery being vampires, may have an intrinsic power to defend themselves and well Ophelia is well a ghost so she's the most vulnerable, clearly. But if you were to divide people, it'd be interesting if Elizabeth we paired with Emery or Ophelia here, to encourage cross dialogue in a setting where there aren't many opportunities for Elizabeth to engage with others, basically anyone besides her beloved. Even in plain logic, pairing people who aren't the most open with each other would ensure they really search for a clue and not end up chatting with their partner. Everything just would've fallen right in place. Untapped potential, I'd say. But nothing wrong with it, objectively.

I glance at her blue-gray eyes and feel my neck burn where her teeth grazed it.


Scandalous! But Elizabeth not wanting to talk about it fits so much in character for her. She's seems like the kind to push away confrontations of emotion or anything uncomfortable and though she's trying to change for the better, it's going to be a difficult road from here. Love that you're exploring the complexities of her nature and struggle to transform into a better partner!

Lilliana just took off without a word and left me here, alone in the unlit hallway. I’m not too mad about it, I just wish that she said something.


Well, I wouldn't mind if she were mad though. Like our protagonist is doing so good, why leave her like that, Lilliana ToT ? I think this part would've worked better in a funny light than the serious tone you went for, but that's just my take!

Obviously I was wrong, but why do I care? It’s not a big deal and yet I can’t help but feel a little sad about it. It’s almost like I don’t deserve to see ghosts as much as I did as a child, like I’m not worth it anymore. That’s probably not what it is at all, but that’s how I feel. I miss being able to see the magic in stuff. I miss feeling special and intuitive.


You're really nailing it one after the other, creeper! This part was so super relatable, I could feel myself wanting to cry. It's so true- magic seems to turn its face from us as we grow up. The monster under my bed, something mysterious I could swear I saw from the corner of my eye, the different shaped clouds that I thought were a sign- oh I miss it all, so very deeply. It's so saddening, to see Elizabeth think like that. Especially as it holds the truth, and so I can't negate the idea no matter what.

It sounds bad but it feels comforting to me.


It never fails to astonish me how very self secure she is. How very refreshing- to embrace your peculiarities and love yourself just the way you are. The best gift you can give yourself!

there is still some difference the rooms have from each other.


I feel the phrasing is off here, how about 'the rooms are not all exactly the same' or 'the rooms are all slightly different in layout/construction/in their own right'?

There’s the same dark green paint and white lace curtains that are in all of the rooms, but there is a music box and dolls on the shelves


Careful, creeper! The writing is getting distracted. Here's what works better- 'All rooms are painted dark green and have the same white lace curtains, but this room happened to have a music box and some dolls on the shelf.'

Behind it is a gramophone, the golden horn blooming out of the wooden box like a flower.


Ooh, a stunning neat imagery!

This could have been Ophelia’s room, but it can’t be, because if she’s Emery’s sister, then she died in the 1600s. Maybe before that. Gramophones were invented in the 1800s and only the wealthy had hand mirrors in the 1600s.


So Elizabeth is the one who just happens to know such weird history facts, cute. I think it speaks to her habit of reading, so nice a nice little thing added for character justification. Her keen eye is bound to help at some point!

Or Emery could have stolen the mirror for her. He was a cowboy, after all. He could have done lots of things that history couldn’t find out. And the gramophone could have been put there long after most of the Lathom family died and Emery became a vampire.


And she counters her own argument so efficiently and quick. To consider both possibilities is actually very mature of her, God I love her character!! Intelligent and still humble enough to analyse her assumptions.

“spoiled” and “careless” and that she “deserved to go missing”


You've perfectly captured the society's darkest whispers. The first two are hurtful enough in themselves but the third is just the nail in the coffin. I would agree that Lenora should've socialised more but the people clearly took it way too far here.

Well about the record, it's interesting even though a little cliche. But I wouldn't really judge too quickly or comment something unnecessary. It doesn't look a bad find for now, but we'll see how it unfolds.

I’m told by my parents that I need to work on my reactions. Whatever that means.


So her parents aren't all that warm, I feel sad for Elizabeth. I don't think they mean bad but to try to tame a thing as reactions- which are known to come naturally, seems unreasonable and frankly, a harsh ask.

I don’t want her to be scared.


Sweet, I'd say a little too much perhaps. But it's okay, I guess it's just the creeper style of things =)

Anyways, let's wrap it up. I loved Elizabeth's commentary, which must come as no surprise. This chapter very much like a monologue and I'm actually torn on how to feel about it. It's great to read, but not so sure that the plot needs it right now. In a way, the absence of the characters makes it feel empty. And it's not like our protagonist has been dealing with too much that giving some reflection time will help her cope. I think some more overthinking over her relationship won't hurt, considering Lilliana basically deserted her. I'd like to see more of Emery and Ophelia, with purpose of course. I feel like well in the story but I don't know them in depth I do Elizabeth, and that's prevents them for being as likable to me. All the advice, is as usual, optional though. It's entirely your call on how to proceed things. Though much wasn't going on, reading Elizabeth's think is always enjoyable.

Had a good time reviewing, see you (very) soon.

Love,
Alex



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