Daisy finds an interesting book

Hey!

You're setting up some excellent suspense here, and I'm intrigued to know what the consequences of this will be!

Your prose is very sparse and moves along quite quickly. This isn't a bad thing, but it is something to be aware of - there are points in this piece where it works and points where it doesn't. You may want to experiment a bit with adding more description, or lingering in a single moment. Ideally, this mode would be one of many tools in your toolbox!

Those last two lines are really strong, and are a great example of this style really working for you. They read to me as Daisy feeling a lot of nervousness, but trying to convince herself that this will be fine - all without stating it directly. Super evocative, and cleverly done. The third person perspective carries a mixture of proximity and distance to Daisy's thoughts that's really crunchy to me. I am right there with her, worried and excited at what the consequences might be. (Although I do wonder if the paragraph break between them is really necessary - I think it would hit just as hard without!)

Daisy crawled in through the window and walked up to the far section in the library, placing the book of monsters back on the shelf where she had found it.

She went to the library at night, for most people in the village wouldn’t be accepting of her reading books on monsters, and that included the librarian.

Here, though, I think you could stand to slow down a bit. In that first paragraph in particular, you've collapsed a lot of action into a single line. The second paragraph feels a bit confusingly placed ('she went to the library at night' would be more natural *before* she's gone inside, imo). It's also doing a bit too much telling rather than showing. I think this information - that this is something she'd get in trouble for, that she is sneaking in - could be communicated a bit more naturally by folding it into the first paragraph. Maybe through Daisy taking extra care to be quiet, or startling because she thinks she's heard the librarian, for example.

I agree with 4revgreen that it feels a little odd for the librarian to disapprove of her reading books about monsters but still stock them. I'm also intrigued about the fact that she's already reading books about monsters, but a book about witches feels like crossing a line! Are witches even more distrusted? Why is that? What's different about them? 'Monsters' feels scarier to me than 'witches', so this is a really fun subversion of expectations!

WAIT, NOT MY HEART JUMPING BECAUSE YOU USED MY REAL-LIFE NAME HERE!!

I have to read the previous part now!

I really liked this short piece. It sets up lots of mystery!

She went to the library at night, for most people in the village wouldn’t be accepting of her reading books on monsters, and that included the librarian.

If they didn't want her to read books about monsters, then why even stock them? Maybe she has an interest in these and realises the local library doesn't stock them, so she needs to go to a special witchy/demonic store in the next town to get any sort of book, a place where no one wants to be seen and there are lots of rumours about, something creepy like that! And that's where she finds the book? Just an idea!

The world of witches and magic.”

Titles should be capitalised! The World of Witches and Magic

but just because the witches acted differently didn’t mean that they were bad.

Yes Daisy, I quite agree. But why do I feel like this isn't going to be the case here....

She just wanted to learn what was kept from her.

I guess it's not really being kept from her if she can just take the book out at the library? I think that confuses the story a little bit.

She just wanted to learn what was kept from her. That was all.

Oooooo a very ominous ending. I like it. She is too innocent, and i know this is not going to end well.