*This story is underneath my folder titled “Salem, Daisy, and many other lost souls in Cherry Brook”. Gacha Club character designs are under this forum: https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?f=27&t=116005&start=1455. Enjoy!*
“I know that you want to torment me, but must you come all the time? Can’t you give it a rest?” Salem asked.
Eerie looked up at him, her orange eyes glinting cheekily and then she squealed out happily:
“No!”
In his mind, Salem could see the blurred faces of his parents, could hear their faded voices. Faintly, his snake tail had phantom sensation of legs. Daisy wriggled in the hold of his coils, his heart began to beat with fear:
Twisting and turning, his legs molded into a snake tail. He slithered far away from town, away from the sight of the humans. Inside, he felt empty. He could eat only small little creatures, take apart their lives, swallow them whole, a demon in the night.
Daisy gasped, a strangled, struggling sound. Salem could feel himself coming back to normal, he could see Eerie clearly.
No, no. He wouldn’t let her win with her macabre images, wouldn’t let her throw him in the spine-curdling past.
With Daisy still wrapped in his tail, Salem pounced on Eerie, biting her finger.
“Oww!!! That wasn’t very nice!” Eerie cried out, froth spooling from her bitten finger. She wasn’t human, so she wouldn’t die from his bite.
But she certainly wasn’t happy.
Eerie began to fade away, her eyes flaming with anger. Daisy relaxed a little bit, Salem could feel her body lose its strain.
Though Eerie wasn’t dead, Salem smiled nonetheless, for he felt power seep into his bones evermore.
Perhaps there wasn’t only doom and gloom that awaited him.
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Gooood morning!
I have come for this folder today~
What a start too! Love the dialogue here :3
I also like this a lot: “Faintly, his snake tail had phantom sensation of legs. “
And I like the emotions coming through in the italics section!
Ohhhh I like the implication that he steals her power via biting.
This was a lovely thing to start the day on, thanks for sharing!
Hope you ave a great day!
Thank you!
I love how you added Gacha in the mix to vision how the characters look and I find that SUPER cool, as a retired Gacha kid. I ADORE how you phrased your story, it's very very well done, I love how you put your words together, how the story starts is genius! as well as how its not just mysterious but it brings also the tingle of humour with it, purely amazing, you NEED to keep writing like this because I need to read part two if it is out, and if you do more please do keep me updated!!
I am glad you enjoyed this! I have many other works with these characters under my folder: "Salem, Daisy, and many other lost souls in Cherry Brook" if you are interested!