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There was once a woman named Alexandria Virginia, who vaguely remembered a blue-haired faerie woman named Elsie visited her when she was young. She would tell her husband, Frank Virginia, about those wonderfully strange childhood memories of speaking to the tiny rainbow-colored fluttering creature, memories that felt hazy and pastel-toned, yet warm to the heart all the same.
Frank told her that it sounded like a nice story and that he was sorry that they could never experience stuff like that as adults again. He spoke as though he didn’t believe that she really spoke to a faerie, that it was something she imagined. Of course, Alexandria would have had to imagine it, but still…
She couldn’t stop the little flickering feeling inside of her that told her there had to be something that happened when she was younger, something that she wasn’t getting properly. There was yet another feeling Alexandria had that the house she and Frank lived in held something deep and old, something that watched them passively and tried to be as happy as it could, something that was a someone. It was in how the house creaked as though there were other footsteps, how a boy’s voice seemed to speak mournfully, how the air seemed to twinkle with the lights of faeries, and how it just felt like there was another presence with them.
But they lived in an old house and Frank didn’t seem bothered in the slightest. Alexandria wasn’t so sure herself, for old houses often wheezed in slightly human ways.
Maybe she missed the bit of magic that came from being a kid, maybe she wanted something bigger than herself to exist.
Yet still, the creaks in the house still made Alexandria wonder, just a little bit…
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Hello! Ranger here for another review!
I have to say right off the bat, I love how warm yet also mysterious this story feels! It gives me the same feeling as picking up something old like a vintage teacup and knowing that while it has a deep history and is mysterious, it was also at one point greatly loved, just like Alexandria’s memories! I also love all of the mystery in this story as well, the things Alexandria can’t quite explain, the feeling of trying to explain something that happened but not being able to, and the cozy feeling of an otherworldly presence that you just can’t put your finger on. The whole story feels very authentic and truly gives the right impression for a firsthand account.
I usually would use this space for critiques but I didn’t have any! This was a great story and I loved how much personality it had!
Hope you have a wonderful day/night!
Ranger
yes, it%u2019s very much like a vintage tea cup.
Thx for reading!!!
I like the way Alexandria describes her memories :3 Gives me a fuzzy feeling too!
Oh and I like that Frank’s so understanding and goes along with it! I think that’s sweet and reasonable of him :3
I feel like this “the house she and Frank” overloads the sentence. Like, it disturbs the rhythm. Try “their house” and maybe that fixes it?
I rly rly like this line: “watched them passively and tried to be as happy as it could, something that was a someone.“ AWWWW
Alrighty, that snippet was more mysterious than disturbing for a change 😊