Young Writers Society

Hey there, how's it going?

I hope you don't mind if I drop in real quick. I'm not one to review poetry that often, so apologies if my interpretation is off or I say anything horribly wrong. I'm only reviewing what I see. :p

Okay. So. This poem seems to be focusing on the last thoughts of a dying person. Said person thinks happy thoughts, blesses his foes, and then proceeds to see his foes! I do like how it ended on that, I'll admit. Suddenly, the speaker realizes what his foes meant when they said all was well, and unfortunately for him, he'll be spending an eternity with them. Ha. I love it.

A few things in this did puzzle me, however.
I liked how the first stanza read, but I thought the last line seemed a bit... off? A reviewer below me mentioned it and I have to agree I'm not entirely sure what it means. Late in life? Like, he's supposing that's why he's dying? Eeek. The "I suppose" part sounded a little funny to me. Is there another way the speaker can say this without sounding so casual?

You flicker a last wish to oppose

to end the deepening plight

You remember the gorgeous skies,

and bless even your foes.

Wow! Is this E D G A R A L L E N P O E?? There is literally only one little tiny nit picky thing that I would change and that would be the line where you said,
"and bless even your foes."
Personally, I would italicize foes instead of your, but otherwise this poem rocks!

HEYO!!! I am Liz!!! I am here for a short review!


"You cry, 'It's late, I suppose!'" -This part, I dont understand the meaning of this..... But hey, pretty much other than this, I think that your poem was great...


My favorite part is the following, because it puts an image inside my head, and it makes me smile, because it is a good picture, in my point of view...

"You flicker a last wish to oppose

to end the deepening plight.

You remember the gorgeous skies,

and bless even your foes.

Its when you see them winking,

you get to know their optimization

when they had said, 'All is Well'!"