Hey, crobbins here for a review!
I'm glad to be reviewing some classic poetry again!
So, onto the nit-picks!
I did find the transition between paragraph three and four was a bit shaky. You go from speaking about light-hearted themes to dark themes. This is an abrupt transition to make, and is very hard to execute. Maybe try shifting into a time in between, talking about the events between as a transition?
I didn't find any spelling issues!
That's all I found for spelling and grammar/formatting issues!
So, I interpret this as the main character dying, and your friends' reactions, followed by the passing on of their legacy. I loved the plot as I interpreted it! (I may be completely off of what you are trying to depict, sorry!) I think that everyone has been touched by death, which makes this piece so relatable. Death may hurt us, but it allows us to come together under writing and poetry. I think this is a beautiful concept.
I loved the seamless formatting of this piece. Your ability to separate the ideas in different paragraphs while keeping the grammar and spelling impeccable astounds me. Great job!
So overall, good job with this! I loved it! I'd love to read more of your work!
-crobbins
Points: 5933
Reviews: 71
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