Hi Insane here!
I`m going to keep it nice and short since previous reviews have made multiple constructive points. I like that you have a rhyme scheme, it's very rare to see poetry now that rhymes the whole way through. I commend you for being able to write sensible rhymes aswell.
I love how you are able to convey such sincere emotion in the way you write and you are obviously very talented at that. Because you have such good ideas and eloquence I think maybe looking at doing a poem without rhymes may make your work seem more mature. Mainly for the reasons that one, when writing the poem you can convey more raw emotion because you are not looking to finish the line off with a specific word or rhyme, and two rhyming poems sometimes read a bit junior schoolish!
This is definitely not a criticism;the way you write is amazing and reading your work is really enjoyable but I`d love to see you do a poem with no rhymes in it because you obviously have talent at empathetic poetry! I especially love the line `The poem ends but not your story`Keep writing I look forward to reading your next work!
Points: 43
Reviews: 6
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