Hey Roman here to review your work
This piece is beautiful,
It's emotive and captivating in the sense that you have strayed away from stereotypical love poems and kind of approached this with a wider perspective. I love how this poem is open to interpretation which can depend on how the reader feels whether they grasp this concept as they are infatuated with their bestfriend or simply delivering tips so that their bestfriend is cared for in ways they deserve.
This poem flowed extremely well and was light on the lips when read out loud, it truly captures raw emotion and talent in its words.
The thing that really stumped me was the line "She doesn't admit" I understand where you were trying to take this line but perhaps replacing this with a phrase that makes it seem as if she doesn't believe that she is worth more than she leads on, or that she doesn't accept how amazing she is.
I like the description in her 'eye bags' it really allows the reader to picture this tired night owl girl with dark puffy eyes.
Other than that this poem is beautifully written and I look forward to reading more of your work.
Roman @ovrd0se
Points: 98
Reviews: 3
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