Hi, Myers here, and please bear with me for this review, it might look harsh.
First thing, the repetition of "Here I stand" is kinda annoying to me, but you may disagree. "Here I stand" would have looked better, if you had used it in the first and the last stanza only. The word "Here" must be accompanied with "Where", just bluffing they sort of look incomplete without each other, and that is what I'd do. To explain further, the whole poem looks like one part of a conditional sentence to me, you know, "If I ........, I'd have.....", and the poem is missing the " I'd have...." part of the sentence. I appreciate your beautiful sense of imagination, the imagery you are trying to create here is also quite beautiful. My advice would be to review other people's work as much as you can to learn new things. Keep on the good work.
Points: 38
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