E - Everyone

I'll turn you into nothing

I'll turn you into nothing; a crushed 9
can. The documentary says, 8
you can't turn something into 7
nothing and nothing to 6
something, but you are 5
more than something. 4
Pollution 3
is a 2
hoax. 1

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Lumi
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Lumi wrote a review · Sun Nov 27, 2016 5:20 am

Lowkey just called the you trash. GPOY.

Personally, I feel like this doesn't carry much weight as a standalone. I get that it's a nonet, and really I don't think those carry much weight to begin with, but all the same I'd like some contextual stanzas experimented around like you do.

I think you could pull off some really sweet ozone imagery, trash imagery, pollution and conversion and nuclear waste imagery. Just. It could all be good---you know what I mean.

This is moreso a comment on the want of more of this than anything, so. Here you go.

Ty

p.s. Weak ending. Really weak ending. Burn it and reforge.

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Dulcet
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Just thought I'd point out the fourth line:

nothing and nothing into 6

Isn't that 7 syllables instead of 6? Or am I hallucinating? :D Great poem either way.

Thanks, I wouldn't have caught that, I really appreciate it!

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IzzyIsHappy
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Now I understand what this is! This turned out great. I hate guessing what poetry is about but I will try.
To me this is a symbol of something that is worthless, but nothing can be turned into something. And my other idea is that this is just about a can that you are recycling. Who knows I'm bad at this like I said.
I really enjoy your works! You are a great writer.
Keep Writing~ Whosabell

Thanks so much!

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Mathy
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Mathy wrote a review · Fri Nov 11, 2016 4:23 pm

I can't really say how I feel about this. I just figured out that it's read without the numbers and it is kind of weird. I get where you are coming from, but I just can't see what this whole poem is about. Why does it say that someone is more than something, and then that pollution is a hoax? I guess the whole part of the poem that says about the documentary makes a bit of sense, but how does being more than something make you different than something in a negative sense? Please explain.

It's a nonet, and I decided to leave the syllables on as I liked how it looked. The documentary is hinting about pollution and recycling with a crushed can and all, so I hope this makes more sense to you now.

Ohhhh! Thanks...



The poetry of the earth is never dead.
— John Keats