Momo, here with a review, as promised!
I like it! Just, with the rhymes, it make me feel like there should be a rhythm? There is one, but it's not constant. And where and what is Laenalaen? What is the White Tower? Just a few questions of mine.
the surrounding darkness took me away...
Only one period is needed here.
That's the only grammar mistake I could find. But I love the sentiment of the poem! Walking through a beautiful city at night, then the day comes and takes the beauty away. I love it! I'm coming for your other works *evil grin*
have a great RevMo!
Momo
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