Young Writers Society

Hello and greetings to you! I'm here to review this song/poem for you!
I don't have any negative critiques, as this is very well written. I like the cadence of the words, you can really hear tons of people chanting this at the top of their lungs, so loud you don't even need music for it. But, music would work well for this too.
I don't know much about composing music, but I still think it's impressive the way you showed off the rhythm of the words even though we have to scorea of music to go with it.
Overall, I think this is a very well written song and you can totally see the story of it behind it.
I hope this helps you!

Hi @Vil I'm here to do a real short review on your song or poem what ever it is, so lets get right into it shell we,
So I really liked reading this, for some reason it just made me feel carom, I do feel like the rhythm to this was pretty good. I also like how you put all the words into cursive I think that is I'm not sure but I like it. also just like @LordMomo it also did not make sense, but as you said its not supposed to, well in that case I in joyed it very much and think you should keep writing, writing lets you express your feelings, witch is very important, I can say I got a lot of images flying across my head when I read this.

So that really is all I can say, I in joyed it in a weird sort of way, I have never really come across something like this before, but I can tell you that it warmed my heart, in away that most things I read never do. I really liked it and I don't see any floors in it.

I hope that you have a great Day/Night

@Vulcanite siring over the green room sparing shards of reviews as she went

this makes no sense to me, but i like it