Heya, Vil! I'm back to review this piece for you.
So I'm gonna get right down to business because my mind isn't where it should be (possibly due to some very sleepy tea I just drank) and it's almost the deadline for week two: I loved this poem like I love all your poems. It's very different from your usual formatting, so that was interesting to see. It's awesome how your speaker just pours their love for this city into their words. I can definitely see it's beloved by many.
For critiques, I only have one: I know you to be an excellent artist when it comes to painting pictures with words. Imagery through tone is one of your strong suits. However, in this poem you fall a teensy bit short of that. While the emotion is all there, I can't quite get an image of this place in my mind. The history is crystal clear in all the stanzas, but in your last two stanzas you seem to lose some steam. The last one I kind of like as a wrap-up, but the second-to-last one could stand to be beefed up a little.
Vil, you have once again delivered a masterful piece from this rich fantasy world. History oozes out of everything you write, and I just can't get enough. This was a real treat to read, and I can't wait to see more! Happy RevMo and happy writing!
Wishing you the very best,
RavenLord
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