The correlation to red in every line was quite clever. It’s something I would have never come up with. I did enjoy the piece. A bit of romance always sparks an interest in me. Your poem was short and cut to the chase. In a lot of cases that can be a good thing. In yours, it was quite good. A bit of imagery would have been nice. Then I would be able to really attach to the story and imagine it in my mind. When reading, I like to be able to see what is happening, through details and such. This poem was not very easy for me to visualize. This may not be what you were going for. This is just my preference. It is not something that requires a drastic change, or change at all. The poem overall was enjoyable. Keep on writing!
Points: 306
Reviews: 4
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