Loosely Lawful | 18

by Ventomology

Published June 15, 2026

18+ Language

In Loosely Lawful

Warning: This work has been rated 18+ for language.

Sera woke with a start, nearly tumbling off of Dr. Crev’s couch, and found six pairs of eyes peering down at her.

“She’s awake!”

“Is she really the lawyer? Dr. Kulaiana said she was undergoing doctrinal revelation, but she doesn’t look that impressive.”

“All lawyers look unimpressive.”

Sera had never taken the bar exam. She wasn’t technically a lawyer. But it was hard to get a word in edgewise when the six people all gawking at her just kept chattering.

“Can I interview you for my next paper?” one of the strangers said, sticking their glasses-clad face right into Sera’s space bubble.

“No, me! Please!”

“Uh,” Sera said. And this, apparently, was so eloquent that the gaggle of probably-grad-students hushed up. Or maybe they actually shut up because Kaliko had just walked in, hands on hips, and leveled them all with a beautiful, disappointed sigh.

Sera shrank into her blanket.

“Remind me,” Kali said, vestigial face fins flicking in annoyance, “what instructions I explicitly gave upon your entrance to Dr. Crev’s home?”

The grad students shuffled about, and a few heads lowered. Shoulders slumped. “Do not goggle at the lawyer,” they grumbled in partial unison.

“Precisely,” Kali said, turning on her heel to lead them out of the room like a line of ducklings. “And I have first dibs, regardless.”

Well. At least Sera knew where Kali stood on the matter, even if it did not make her feel any less like a test subject. She waited until the last of the grad students filed out, then immediately rolled up the blanket, flopped off the couch, and slunk away in search of Kyle.

Walking through Dr. Crev’s house felt a bit like visiting the temple of a different god. The professor’s furniture was all understated hardwood, and she kept things so tidy that she must have been cleaning with magic–either conjured cleaning spirits or brute force powerwashing. It had all the trappings of unostentatious wealth, and none of the comfort of Sera’s own dormitory in Librata’s temple.

She did find Kyle, eventually, still splayed out over a king-sized bed in a tastefully decorated guest bedroom. His snores shook the walls–or would, if the walls weren’t probably magic. A clock on the bedside table told her it was almost nine. Maybe if she went out and found hot breakfast to bring back, the smell of it would wake him up.

“Oh good. You’re up.”

Sera jumped out of her skin. “Librata above, Avon! Can’t you knock?”

Avon only rolled their eyes. “Benny is still knocked out too, and like us, I don’t think either of them will want to brave the congress of brainiacs for breakfast. Let’s you and I go fetch something.”

Biting her lip, Sera tried to read Avon’s expression. They kept it cool, looking not at her eyes, but definitely somewhere on her head, like they wanted to face her straight-on, but felt just as weird about it as she did. Should she apologize for their screaming match on the way home yesterday?

Before the thought had even fully formed, the spark of power in her chest fluttered in righteous annoyance, and she grimaced. She was probably supposed to apologize for a lot of things, screaming match included. Like being an ass all the other times they'd run into each other the past two years, or leaving Avon without explanation, or never taking any of the early opportunities she'd had to reconnect and say she was sorry.

…Maybe not yet though.

Sera squared her shoulders and edged past Avon through the doorway. “Right. Right on. Let’s go.”

They wound out of the house and down Dr. Crev’s tidy garden walkway before turning left toward the student district. Every block, the sidewalks grew more and more crowded, until Sera and Avon were fighting through the throngs of students on their way to morning classes. Coffee and pastry and noise filled the air.

Avon eventually pulled them into a down-the-sidewalk line that snaked its way into a tiny, decrepit, signless storefront. And then they stood there together. Awkwardly. Sometimes, the line moved, and they shuffled a half step forward. Avon and Sera did not say a word to each other for several long, crowded minutes.

And then:

“This is ridiculous,” Avon said.

“The line? Or”-

“No!” Avon snapped to face Sera, taking her by the shoulders to make her face them. Were they going to have it out on the sidewalk? In front of everyone and all the gods? “Us! We are ridiculous!”

“We just caused a scene yesterday,” Sera said. “Are we really going to”-

Stepping in close, Avon lowered their mouth to Sera’s ear. Conveniently, it meant she didn’t have to make eye contact with them, which did make it a little easier to pretend they hadn’t just been standing awkwardly and not talking to each other. “I’m sorry for yelling at you about your new magic,” Avon said. It wasn’t a whisper; the street was too loud for that. But the proximity and the sudden straight, serious tone made it feel like one. “Kali told me this kind of thing happens sometimes, with religious people.”

“It’s fine,” Sera replied. She should say something else, probably. Sorry for yelling back? Sorry for being dickish all the time? Sorry for running off to the temple two years ago without saying anything?

Avon waited a beat, and Sera could feel by the raise of the tiny hairs on her neck that they were staring at her, waiting for her to look back, or say one of the many things that sat heavy on her tongue. But then the moment passed, and Avon deflated. They dropped their head onto Sera’s shoulder and gazed out at the long line still between them and breakfast. The rush of students kept going.

“You were right, honestly,” Sera said, after a few more glacier-slow steps toward the door. “What you said up in Timberheight. I am kind of a coward.”

With a groan, Avon picked their head up off her shoulder. “No you’re not. I mean, you’re probably right about the monster”-

“I’m not talking about the monster.”

They examined her, even as Sera continued to avoid making eye contact. And then, after a long breath through their teeth, Avon reached a hand up and scruffed it through her hair.

“Hey!”

“The line at La Drippe probably isn’t the best place to have this conversation.”

“You started it,” Sera grumbled, but she nonetheless deflated in relief. She would have more time to figure out what she was supposed to say. “Also, is this place really called La Drippe? That’s such a stupid name.”

Avon grinned. “It is a bit obnoxious, but Kali recommended it.”

That wasn’t good. Kali had the caffeine tolerance of a blue whale and couldn’t taste espresso. She drank coffee so black it could have come from a tar pit. Sera might combust if she drank that shit. “Please tell me they have decent pastries,” she said, before shuffling along once more.

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Liminality
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Liminality wrote a review Review · Jul 18

Hi again Vento! Lim here with a short review.

It looks like we'll have to wait a bit before the next backstory part. The scene with the grad students was pretty funny. I'm not sure if I've ever seen a grad student watch someone sleep for research in real life (at least not before going through an extensive information sheet and consent form), but it works as a character moment for Kali, who gets to boss them around.

I like that we are getting a bit more on social class in this setting with the descriptions of Dr. Crev's house. I also like that Sera is wrestling over whether or not to admit she was wrong. Avon shouting at her over the powers was undeserved, I think, but it's clear through the hints in the chapters that the argument isn't really about that.

. . . on the sidewalk? In front of everyone and all the gods? “Us! We are ridiculous!”


I got a bit confused reading this bit. For a moment I was like: wait, do gods not watch people in private places in this setting? I think having "all the gods" in the same sentence as "everyone" made me think "on the sidewalk" applied to both, but that's probably not the intention here.

But then the moment passed, and Avon deflated. They dropped their head onto Sera’s shoulder and gazed out at the long line still between them and breakfast. 

I felt bad for Avon in this scene. It really felt like they were trying to get through to Sera, and from their perspective she's just not meeting them halfway - at least until the next paragraph.

For some reason I can't remember what Avon told Sera in Timberheight XP. I went back and looked, but I couldn't find a part where they call her a coward? I guess they could have implied it when they get mad she came after them during the monster hunt, but that read more as being annoyed Sera went back on their agreement.

The argument feels like it dissolves pretty quickly. I feel like having a couple more paragraphs both on what Sera is thinking and what she thinks Avon is thinking might help with that? Like maybe Avon already wants to end the argument in the beginning, so their body language shows that.

I like the character consistency. You're really good at putting in little details like Sera being worried about "causing a scene" or Kaliko's caffeine tolerance which make the characters feel very real, and present, and themselves. Even though Kyle doesn't have speaking lines in this chapter, the way he sleeps still characterises him as this laid back, easily satisfied person.

From the end of this chapter, I'm guessing they will reconvene with Kaliko and Dr. Crev about the translation ritual next. I wonder what the writing will say and what it might have to do with the Consumption, if anything <.<

Hope this helps, and keep writing!
-Lim

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Tikaya
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Tikaya wrote a review Review · Jun 20

Well once I have finished reading this you really do need to finish Loosely Lawful with LMS, huh? XD

Whoever said that deserves a raise after that Sera-shaming! “All lawyers look unimpressive.”

Hmm I do wish you would settle us more quickly on where in the timeline this takes place?

That’s a really cool description: “Walking through Dr. Crev’s house felt a bit like visiting the temple of a different god.”

LOL: “brute force powerwashing“

I get the feeling that Sera fell asleep in the living room and someone thoughtful gave her a blanket. I think she’s supposed to have her private room where undergrads cant just come in to gawk at…

Hmmm where did Avon come from tho? Maybe you could add a description here? Sera might say they could have knocked but it felt like she left the door open?

I like that they get to spend time together and that Avon offers here: “Let’s you and I go fetch something.”
And also that their relationship has changed bc of what she did and they are both too awkward atm to express this…

Ohh I like that her newfound power approves whenever she has justice (not law-ful!) thoughts~ (bc law and justice are not the same thing!!)

Ohh what’s this “leaving Avon with no explanation”? Hmmm I wonder if this was right after she received the letter and just never told them abt it….

I do like how Sera immediately jumps for the worst conclusion when Avon says “this is ridiculous” when I read more a “maybe we should actually talk abt what happened” from them XD

“with religious ppl” like a separate class of ppl LOL I do like this. Aww.

The thought that she left Avon immediately after learning of her sister’s death so she can learn law in the temple intensifies with this: “Sorry for running off to the temple two years ago without saying anything?”

Aww my insides contracted when I read this: “and Avon deflated” aww I feel for them. Ahhh Sera!!

Also: Awwwwwww! “They dropped their head onto Sera’s shoulder and gazed out at the long line”

Ohh I do like how Avon is now admitting that more research might be necessary to deal with the monster (at least this is what I read into their line) (and yes, I am still annoyed we didn’t get a scene where they talked about THIS change of heart grumble grumble)

Aww cute final paragraph. I also like the implication that they will continue this talk. I like this a lot :3
I like your characters a lot too!

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Ventomology replied · Jun 21

Wow you were on such a tear today!

I'm honestly not sure where I stumbled across this stylistic choice to jump between scenes that can be very far apart in time/space. Maybe I'd reread an Ngozi Ukazu comic when I made it through that section lol. Unfortunately much quicker to establish settings in comics, so I have some work to do.

Could also be a product of how much writing and rewriting went into the 6 chapters that went up just now. I think I'd been sitting on 13 and 14 for like a year! It's hard to keep track of what I have or haven't established. Hopefully some of the confusion goes away as we get into things that are being published more or less in sync with when I'm writing them... Though I'm sure the prose will be much less clean.

Thanks so much for keeping up with all this! I'm so excited that youre enjoying the history with Avon and Sera... It's probably one of the most important parts of the story, so good to know it's landing, even if I still have to get some other things more dialed in.

Tikaya replied · Jun 21

I did wait for the best moment to read all of it in one go =D

I don't think jumping forward was the problem, more the not telling the readers how much you jumped in a timely manner XD

It did get better! I more had the feeling that you too rather wanted to do do the action scene and the Sera and Avon talk scene than the administrative scenes :3

if you have any questions, let me know!!



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