Loosely Lawful | 17

by Ventomology

Published June 15, 2026

18+ Language

In Loosely Lawful

Warning: This work has been rated 18+ for language.

“Like I said,” Sera yelled, “I literally did not know I could do that!”

“Oh sure!” Avon adjusted their grip on one of the many, many shopping bags and whipped around to snarl at her. “Because we all develop fun new powers right when we need them in the height of battle.”

“I have never in my life been powerful enough to do that! You, of all people, ought to know exactly where I started on the whole magic thing.”

“Are we talking about our past now?” Avon screeched back. “Because if we are, then maybe it’s time to rehash a few things!”

Across the street, a pair of parents pushing their pram-bound infants around for an afternoon stroll sent them all dirty looks. They were, admittedly, back in the tranquil, wealthy, professorial neighborhood where Dr. Crev lived. Sera could even see the jut of Dr. Crev’s townhouse above its neighbors, observation deck and all. It probably wouldn’t be good to show up at the door yelling and screaming at each other.

Instead of dignifying Avon with a response, Sera put a hand over her bloodied shoulder and ignored the obvious bait. Better to let them cool down so they could all focus on Kali’s translation ritual as soon as they arrived. She picked up the pace, walking past Avon, though not before they could slip in the last word.

“Oooh, running away again. You know I’m right!”

Avon didn’t know what they were talking about.

With her good arm, Sera flung open Dr. Crev’s gate and marched up the front walk. The door opened for her automatically; someone must have done something with the house’s magical wards. Probably, it had been Kali, who stood in the hallway to the kitchen, looking fetchingly dishevelled.

“Six seas,” she breathed, “not an average shopping trip, I wager? Come in. Try not to hemhorrage everywhere.”

“Hemhorrage is an exaggeration,” Sera grumbled, but she let Kaliko nudge her down a hallway and into what was very clearly the guest bathroom. Avon and the boys tromped in behind them, their footsteps muffled as Kaliko closed the bathroom door and rummaged through the cabinets.

Not sure what to say, Sera started the long, annoying process of unbuckling and shedding her armor. Her shoulder twinged as she reached awkwardly around herself, but she managed to shrug off her pauldrons and unhook her breastplate anyway. Dust and grime wafted off her and onto the pristine, white floor of Dr. Crev’s bathroom, and since Sera had already gotten the place dirty, she figured she might as well rip off the bloodied padding and tunic she wore under that as well.

She dropped onto the edge of the bathtub and twisted around to try and look at the arrow wound.

It seemed messy at first, crusty with the uncomfortable combination of sweat and drying blood, but when Sera looked closer, she saw the wound had already closed. A thick, white scar bridged the skin on either side. She hadn’t even needed to stitch it.

Sera poked at it. The shoulder still ached–her muscles would need time to fully mend–but she was definitely healed. When had she done that?

“Hey Kali, quick question.”

Kaliko stood, first aid kid in hand, and shut the drawer behind her with an efficient bump of her bum. “Yes?”

Chewing on her words, Sera tugged at the now-healed skin to see if it would break. “Have you ever heard of people just like, suddenly having magic they didn’t have before? And maybe power. Like without training or studying for it.”

As she dug through the kit for cleaning wipes and disinfectant, Kali considered the question. “It’s not unheard of.” She turned around and leaned over Sera’s shoulder to scrub away at the dried blood, lips pursing as she likewise found the area well-healed. Kali paused, put down the disinfectant, and slipped her glasses out of her pocket.

She stared at Sera.

“Um. What are you”-

“Well! I suppose congratulations are in order.” Kali tucked her glasses away and set back to work, so smiley she lit up the bathroom.

“Why?”

“You seem to be a potential case of doctrinal revelation. It’s an immeasurably difficult phenomenon to study. It’s a rare cleric who undergoes the process, and an even rarer one who deigns to take notes in enough detail for qualitative or quantitative data. I hope you’ll grant me the privilege of taking a few measurements as you progress.”

With Kali’s torso mostly over Sera’s face and shoulder, it was impossible to make eye contact or in any way convey how batshit and nonsensical the other girl sounded. “What?” Sera said again instead, sounding very intelligent. “Hold on- I don’t- Are you implying I’m some kind of special? That’s crazy.”

“Says the cleric who experienced direct divine contact from beyond the etherial veil! You know some experts hypothesize that fewer have received such visions than undergone doctrinal revelation? Visions are simply easier to record.” She stood, tossed a bloodied square of cotton rag into the garbage, and started wiping more vigorously at Sera’s shoulder with a fresh towel. “Or lie about, I suppose.”

“What even is this doctor stuff?”

Sera could hear Kali’s eye roll. “Doctrinal revelation? The name is so autological I shouldn’t need to explain it. Tell me, did you did experience any new and revelatory thoughts before blasting off magic you’d never been able to perform before?”

“Not particularly.” Sera was pretty sure the only thing in her head had been how unfair it was that the Wildes thought they could get away with attacking people just because they had the money to either cover it up, the money for the best lawyers, and maybe even money to bribe or intimidate the courts in their favor. It wasn’t an original thought.

“You’re thinking too hard.” Kali stepped back and turned around to wash the rag clean in the sink. “It doesn’t have to be a brilliant thought, you know. It’s not very scientific, but my understanding of philosophy is that many important ideas are obvious and often repeated. Your renewed understanding and appreciation of it may be the more crucial element.” She draped the rag over the side of the bathtub and gave Sera one last, long look. “It would be invaluable if you would keep a diary or something during this time. For my research.” And then she strode out the door, leaving Sera in the yawning, empty quiet of Dr. Crev’s guest bathroom.

Sera gave herself a few spare thoughts along the lines of what the hell, Kali? And this is stupid! And I’m still pretty sure there’s no way in the six seas I can be any kind of special. But annoyingly, Kali’s words kept rattling around in her brain.

No, it wasn’t original to think that the things rich people could use their money to get away with were unfair. But it was, maybe, something that Sera hadn’t allowed herself to think about in a long time.

When even was the last time? As a child, she’d been too focused on winning the Kavarn family’s sponsorship to consider how unfair anything was. She’d been too busy in law school, and too tired after she dropped out. But now she’d thought of both the before and after of the event that turned her whole life upside down, and like pulling a thread on a sweater, Sera found she couldn’t stop the memory that came next.

Suddenly, she wasn’t in Dr. Crev’s guest bathroom any more, seated on the edge of an elegant, clawfooted bathtub.

She sat on a sad, dingy bed that sagged under her weight, fingers of one hand wrapped tight in the quilted blanket her mother had given her when she set off from home. She was in that cramped apartment she’d shared with Avon, where they’d licked their wounds together after their first few jobs as a team. She smelled the lavender sachets they each tucked under their pillows, and the spices she’d used to cook their shared dinners. She heard the noisy, raucous street outside their window. And she saw the untidy scrawl of her father’s letter, informing her that her little sister had just passed away.

And she’d known better than her own heart that nothing that the Kavarns did with their money was ever fair, that it had been their thoughtless actions that killed not only Sera’s sister, but a hundred other children in the Kavarn mountain range. For a split second, on her old bed in that dirty apartment building, she’d felt the heat of anger flash through her blood. What could she do with her law degree, once she had it? Could she burn down the Kavarn family? Could she flay them with their own callousness? Could she find justice for every family just like hers?

But her sister had just died, and before the anger could take root, it drowned.

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AlexWrites
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AlexWrites wrote a review Review · Yesterday

Hiya, Vent! Alex is back with a review, thankfully it didn't take me as long this time. Let's get into it~

“Like I said,” Sera yelled, “I literally did not know I could do that!”

I know I didn't touch on this chapter, and as criminal it might be, let me make up for it! I was actually waiting for some reaction to it before I commented myself, to make sense of my own thoughts better. I remember saying Sera's magic as weak, not so long ago. I believe that was hinted at several times, with her getting tired pretty quick. Compared to Kali who kept at her spell for so long, her strength seems nothing in comparison. She also has a tendency of avoiding other acolytes, which makes me believe she must not have been much trained in her abilities too. Healing Kyle is the only real instance I found where she really pulled through, but that was the peak of her magical being. Right now, she's crossed that previous boundary. I think the reason being she wasn't fully in control, and it was more of Librata's power surge. Kinda reminds me of Benny, how he always breaks all expectations when some bigger force takes control. I think it'll feel very rewarding if they both learn to handle all this brewing inside themselves, both for the plot and the group's success in future adventures. They're a sweet found family <3

“Because we all develop fun new powers right when we need them in the height of battle.”

Says the person who can transform into so many animals, like we're jealous of the diversity you get!

“I have never in my life been powerful enough to do that! You, of all people, ought to know exactly where I started on the whole magic thing.”

Phew, I'm so glad Sera claims that. I was afraid I'd have underestimated and by extension offended her! And the fact that Avon knows where she started at hints at their long history- I'm really curious to learn more about it but you've been breadcrumbing me for a while now.. It is genius writing, but Librata, if it ain't tiring as a reader.

“Are we talking about our past now?” Avon screeched back. “Because if we are, then maybe it’s time to rehash a few things!”

Ohhh yes, is it finally time? Seems like whatever it was, Avon has some unsaid things on the matter. Maybe it was Sera's fault that they're so bitter now..

Instead of dignifying Avon with a response, Sera put a hand over her bloodied shoulder and ignored the obvious bait.

*Humphs* guess another time, huh? I really hate you right now, Sera! Cuz what about my well deserved tea?

“Oooh, running away again. You know I’m right!”
Avon didn’t know what they were talking about.

Well, I don't like how provocative Avon is being here. But at least an argument will get everyone's building up anger inside, and maybe they can even mend some bridges. But Sera's avoidant behaviour is most realistic and relatable. We don't get closure with everyone, and sometimes it's best to ignore the other person if we don't want to have a conversation and they don't understand it. Her need to preserve her own peace does not go unseen, but I also see another possibility. The way the last line is phrased so mysteriously makes me think if Avon actually doesn't know the whole story. Maybe something Sera did was wrong in their eyes but only because they never got the full picture? Oh, I loved misunderstandings so very much!

Sera poked at it. The shoulder still ached–her muscles would need time to fully mend–but she was definitely healed. When had she done that?

Perhaps when the power consumed her? Healing could be a side effect of that, something it did beside the actual matter at hand. Is healing by her magic otherwise meant to be intentional and consuming, and is it something that she does often? I remember her ritual on Kyle but I haven't seen her work on herself before- how does she fix her own wounds?

shut the drawer behind her with an efficient bump of her bum

Whenever I try to get serious in the story, you have your own plans XD. But I do appreciate this, really lightens the mood and throws in some entertainment for the audience that might find such stuff boring.

“You seem to be a potential case of doctrinal revelation. It’s an immeasurably difficult phenomenon to study. It’s a rare cleric who undergoes the process, and an even rarer one who deigns to take notes in enough detail for qualitative or quantitative data. I hope you’ll grant me the privilege of taking a few measurements as you progress.”

Finally some really explanation! I love how Kali goes straight for her own benefit in all this. She's not too happy for it, or thinks of the consequences it can have for their progress- but plainly states the fact and moves on. She's smart, and doesn't hide it. I'm very impressed how you gave her this room of her own to shine, instead of just Avon's roomate and Kyle's girl toy. She's not just a pretty girl, but far from it. Her brains and capabilities alone demand respect, something her beauty would never have been able to replicate. She really doesn't have it all, but she's earned it! She's selfish, which is not all too bad. But I guess it just backs up my earlier claim of Benny being the only genuinely nice person here, except for Kyle sometimes.

“Says the cleric who experienced direct divine contact from beyond the etherial veil! You know some experts hypothesize that fewer have received such visions than undergone doctrinal revelation? Visions are simply easier to record.”

I like Kali pointing out the obvious. It's most in her style too! I can imagine Benny saying it in surprise while Avon phrasing it like a taunt, if they were in her place. All your characters have a distinct voice, and I like how consistently you carry them. Commendable really! I'm a fan of the logic here, as well. A realisation of overpowering abilities is bound to go unnoticed in people who haven't had their outburst yet, than visions which are bound to hit when the universe has something important to show you. People can overestimate their magic, but not really teleporting.

“Or lie about, I suppose.”

Forever a cynic, is she now? It feels like she doesn't have a whole lot of faith in the entire thing. I would've said it almost sounds like an accusation on Sera, but she's too much in the whole thing to actually think that now. Or does she still think Sera is making up the vision part, and stumbled on the information hanging out with fellow acolytes? It's possible, but I don't see an intention for someone who hates attention as much as herself and has nothing to gain from it.

Sera could hear Kali’s eye roll.

Ooh, nice line you have here! Almost poetic, and I like how prominently it sets the image in my head.

“You’re thinking too hard.” Kali stepped back and turned around to wash the rag clean in the sink. “It doesn’t have to be a brilliant thought, you know. It’s not very scientific, but my understanding of philosophy is that many important ideas are obvious and often repeated. Your renewed understanding and appreciation of it may be the more crucial element.”

Okay, this sounds reasonable! Looking at magic from a realistic lens to justify it is my favorite things that fantasy writers do. It really helps us convince us that see, it makes sense XD
Impeccable writing here, Vent!

Suddenly, she wasn’t in Dr. Crev’s guest bathroom any more, seated on the edge of an elegant, clawfooted bathtub.

Another vision?! Oh my, Sera is definitely Librata's favorite..

She was in that cramped apartment she’d shared with Avon, where they’d licked their wounds together after their first few jobs as a team.

They actually started adventuring together? The roomate history also explains why he was bragging about Kali near the beginning, as if she was a better company than Sera. I actually agree, since their personal ambitions tie them together, something Sera and Kyle don't share. It really seems like they were fine then, I wonder how it all began to go south..

And she saw the untidy scrawl of her father’s letter, informing her that her little sister had just passed away.

Oh my, I feel so much for her. So that's why she never talks about her family, that's such scarring trauma. My poor baby :hugs:
I don't how to feel about this being a letter though, couldn't the father meet to tell this to her in person or call her home for some time? Maybe it's a hint that she wasn't the closest to them around the time though.

And she’d known better than her own heart that nothing that the Kavarns did with their money was ever fair, that it had been their thoughtless actions that killed not only Sera’s sister, but a hundred other children in the Kavarn mountain range. For a split second, on her old bed in that dirty apartment building, she’d felt the heat of anger flash through her blood. What could she do with her law degree, once she had it? Could she burn down the Kavarn family? Could she flay them with their own callousness? Could she find justice for every family just like hers?

But her sister had just died, and before the anger could take root, it drowned.

Librata, this was intense. I wonder if this why she left law, in her grief. Because what if she even does manage to win against them? It won't bring her sister back, who died at the hands of an unfair system. It's all vain at the end anyways.. The idea of going back must remind her of that pain subconsciously, that's why she keeps avoiding it.
One small critique though- I don't get the point she is in her degree at this point though, and exactly why she left. Her sister's death may have something to do with it, but I feel like I'm missing s few steps here. Also, was she not at all considering to leave before this incident? I'm supposing she's midway in her degree in this, but there's little to support that assumption. I believe it was also important to add how her bond was to her sister. It would've made the loss more impactful while allowing the audience to connect more with her. It's good premise, but a little muddied. Might be intentional if it's meant as just a bit of a spoiler peek though.

That's all for now, this was a good read. Thanks for sharing, see you in the next one~

Love, Alex

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Liminality wrote a review Review · Jul 17

Hi again Vento! Lim here with a short review.

The beginning feels a bit sudden, like there might have been some more conversation between Avon and Sera before the first line, but I'm glad that I can easily tell what the argument is about and that it connects directly with the big event in the last chapter.

The doctrinal revelation reveal was pretty unexpected. I can definitely see how being the 'chosen one' works with Sera's inner conflict. She feels uncomfortable being in a position of importance or thinking about what she's 'meant' to be doing, so we see her in a life of small goals and absorbing herself in making ends meet. In this chapter, the reveal of her backstory is beginning to show that maybe she tried doing something bigger than that before and failed, and that's why this role is so painful for her.

Somehow even though Sera received a special vision from Librata, I sort of hadn't thought it would be a 'chosen one' story, if that makes sense? Because I didn't expect that genre element to it, Sera saying repeatedly that she couldn't be someone 'special' felt a bit like an odd choice of phrasing. Like it felt a little too young for her? Maybe I just haven't read enough quest fantasy as an adult, that I associate the 'I can't be special' phrasing with someone younger xD

Additionally, I like how Kaliko's first instinct is to ask if she can take measurements - that feels very in-character!

“What even is this doctor stuff?”


I wonder if they would have covered doctrinal revelation in Sera's cleric training? Or is it something so rare that only specialists know about it?

When even was the last time? As a child, she’d been too focused on winning the Kavarn family’s sponsorship to consider how unfair anything was. 


I feel like I've seen the Kavarn family mentioned before, but it might have been a couple of chapters ago so I don't really have a sense of their place in the setting. Like are they a mining company (operating on a mountain range)? It probably gets more detail in the next chapter, but I feel like the context of Sera's situation could be clearer to me with that information.

I liked the flashback/memory parts towards the end of the chapter. That whole paragraph from "She sat on a sad, dingy bed . . ." was really good. The way her mind wanders between all these related memories, revealing the close relationship she used to have with Avon really makes me feel her sadness and the tenuousness of those times. The specific sensory details like lavender sachets really helps too. It makes me think of so many things! The fragrances maybe helping with the smell living in a dingy apartment. The idea that they both liked the same scent, when current day Avon and Sera probably wouldn't admit to sharing anything. Also, when I read it, it sort of reminded me of the way they did the Ramona + Roxy flashback in the Scott Pilgrim anime if you've seen that (the silent scenes implying all the closeness and the real meaning of the relationship in contrast to the way Ramona denies it in the present). Maybe that's a stretch, but it's just what came to mind for me.

Overall, this chapter leaves me eager to know more about the much-teased backstory event of what exactly happened when Sera was in law school. The theme of injustice and wealth is really interesting, especially when Dr. Crev, a current ally, has some link to wealth living in a 'professorial' neighbourhood. I feel like there's a lot of conflict and depth to be explored there.

Hope this helps, and keep writing!
-Lim

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Tikaya wrote a review Review · Jun 20

Alright with what kind of dizzing location change are you gonna follow up the sheer excellence of last chapter?

Ah okay, we are at least still on the shopping trip. Solid follow up so far XD

I like how you set the scene. The descriptions all land for me and I immediately know where we are and how much time has passed. Thank you!

I guess I also would like an explanation on what Kali did while they went shopping… Hmmm!

Excellent phrasing: “looking fetchingly dishevelled.”
I also love the “six seas!” exclamation!

Mwahahaha “Try not to hemhorrage everywhere.”

I feel like it should be obvious that patreon magic might be different from general wizardry? Like a god(dess) can just decide “yeah this disciple of mine is doing my work atm and they are doing it splendidly, here they get a power boost”? I would think this would happen often?
Maybe this is also Librata’s way of saying: Look I love you go do the bar exam.

What do you mean by “smiley” here? “so smiley she lit up the bathroom”

One of these “did”s is one to many xd “did you did experience”

“It wasn’t an original thought.” Agreed but then: how many Librata disciples are active fighters?

I do love Kali’s interest in the sciences too :3 She and Avon do make a wonderful addition to your main characters!

I wonder why Sera is fighting so hard against the thought of being somehow special?

I want you to know that I read the final few paragraphs in stunned awe. How you tie the memory of being in her old apartment together with how she used to work with Avon to the letter and then her thoughts and how I bet this was one moment where Librata first took notice of her. How this explains so effortlessly some of what Sera wants to do and how invested I am in her progression now. Oh I love this.
And the final line is just perfect. The symbolism! Ahhhhh!!!

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