Loosely Lawful | 12

by Ventomology

Published March 4, 2026

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In Loosely Lawful

Warning: This work has been rated 18+ for language.

They lay there, all five of them, heaving for air on the wooden floor. After the endless animal howls and crashing trees, the silence was startling. Kaliko wheezed, eyes squeezed shut as she tried to avoid the oncoming headache of magical exhaustion. Benvolio’s fine shirt dripped with sweat and blood. Sera took a long, groaning breath, and tried to remember the last time she’d felt like this, like Librata’s spirit sat so low inside of her that she’d have to beg and cry to draw her back out.

Above her, Kyle’s chest heaved with a strange, rattling sound. Bright red blood bloomed across his shirt.

Shit.

Sera snapped back to reality. She wrestled her way out from under Kyle, trying not to jostle him too badly, and took stock. His whole back was opened up, split diagonally from shoulder to waist by three deep gashes that carved across the bones in his spine and scraped across his ribs.

She was tapped. Kali was tapped. And Sera knew from experience that Avon’s magic didn’t work quite right for other people. That left Benvolius.

No, Benvolius had said he was almost out, too, which meant they didn’t have enough power between all four of them to fix this. Not unless Sera could find an excuse to bring more out of her connection to Librata. She could, maybe, wedge a contract into the process of pooling magic with Benvolius. It was an outdated way of doing things, but it placed the affair squarely in her goddess’s sphere of influence, which might allow Sera to draw more power than she currently had available.

“Avon,” Sera said, finding her voice. She sounded hoarse. “I need bandages and hot water. Pronto.”

“What?”

“Go!”

Avon scrambled up. They were furthest out from the group, and the least blood-splattered, and Sera shoved at them as they raced through the hostel room door. Kali, looking beautifully bedraggled, crawled out next.

“Kali, I need your sewing kit and your purified spider’s thread, and then you’re going to help me hold the wounds closed.”

“Oh,” Kali said, finally seeing the growing pool of blood on the floor, “yes.” She wobbled, but dug through her bag anyway.

“And Benvolius,” Sera demanded, pulling him up from the floor, “you and I are going to pool whatever we’ve got left.”

“What?!”

She took his hand in a firm shake and stared him in the eye, and Benvolius, to his credit, met her gaze. His lip quivered, and his sweat-drenched hair lay in frazzled lines across his face, crisscrossing with Kyle’s blood.

“Benvolius,” Sera said, her own voice finally evening out, “are you comfortable with magic pooling?”

“I”- He took a short, full breath, pointedly not looking at the ruin of Kyle’s back. He gulped. “Yes.”

“Then repeat after me. I, Benvolius”-

“I, Benvolius”-

Sera took his other hand and leaned in close, touching her forehead to his as the contract jumped out in her mind. The flutter of Librata’s spirt perked up inside her chest. “Do hereby consent to the pooling of magic with Seraphina, on the fifteenth day, of the eighth month, of the four-hundred and ninety-seventh year Post-Consumption, for the singular purpose of restoring health to Kyle. I will provide what is necessary to heal him, or what remains of my pool before I am tapped, whichever occurs first.

“This I swear,” she finished.

“This I swear,” Benvolius repeated.

And then, finally, Librata answered. Magic flooded back into that hole in her chest, crashing forward to enforce the contract between her and Benvolius, and Sera let it rise into her veins to tug at the deep green, pine-smelling power that lived in him. Then, link established, she let go of his hands to meet Avon as they crashed back into the room, hot water sloshing out of the bucket they’d brought.

Sera knelt at Kyle’s side. His breathing had slowed, his back rising and falling only when his lungs couldn’t take the lack of air any longer. His shining silver hair was stained dark red as it fell in clumps across his cheeks. She gestured for everyone to kneel with her.

“I’m going to clean the wound and heal the bones and nerves first,” Sera explained. “Then we’ll move on to the sutures. We’ll start with the central wound, and then the left, and then the right. All clear? No one’s going to be sick?”

Benvolius, still a little green in the face, nodded. Kali tucked a stray hair out of her face, her mouth set in grim determination. Avon was already soaking towels in the hot water.

Tugging her and Benvolius’s magical pool to her hands, Sera waved over Kyle’s back, willing any dirt or particles or gross, microscopic wrigglies to burn away in the purifying wash of magic. She poured energy into his bones, growing back the marrow and porous centers in a slow, hair’s breadth-by-hair’s breadth climb, until she glanced at Kali, and the other girl nodded, and Sera finally topped them off with a solid layer. She unwound time on the damaged nerves over his spine, swallowing back bile as the fibers swung back and forth before snapping back into place as they had been before the cut.

And then, finally, they could do the easy part. Sera checked in on her magic levels, pausing for a moment to breathe as Avon began blotting at the wounds with the wet towels. She’d almost completely drained Benvolius’s magic, and Librata’s spirit was starting to become reluctant, now that the contract had done some of its work. Holding her hands out for the needle and spider’s silk thread, Sera grit her teeth. She would finish this. She’d need to follow-up on the muscle regeneration tomorrow, but she could close his wounds today.

Sera had never been fantastic at all this medical junk; she preferred brute force and power to mend Kyle on the rare occasion that she needed to. The spider’s silk thread glowed with magic as she threaded it, hands shaking almost imperceptibly. She had to settle her wrist and little finger against Kyle’s skin when she finally started sewing.

They worked seamlessly–thank Librata. Avon kept the working area spotless, slipping their hands under Kali and Benvolius’s as the other two pinched the skin together. Kali murmured under her breath, guiding Benvolius even as she sometimes struggled to keep herself engaged, looking at Kyle like this. Sera made each pass of the needle with a confidence she didn’t feel, tamping down the flow of magic to make it last as long as possible.

They made it down the left gash with unbelievable efficiency, closing it up like a zipper. The shining spider’s thread pulsed with magic, slowly knitting skin together in the wake of the suturing. The center gash healed more slowly, Sera’s stitches having been a little less clean. On the third, halfway down the long line of the wound, Sera felt her connection to Benvolius drop. The magic turned white instead of pale green, and her chest caved open. Her hands shook. She reached inside her own soul, digging down for the very last dregs of magic in her, and tried to keep her eyes open.

When she finished, she looked up at the others, her breaths coming short, her vision fuzzy. “Someone has to…”

“I’ll do it,” Avon said, standing. Their face was hard, all right angles and stern lines. The freckles had faded to a faint hint of discoloration. “You’re all running on nothing. Get some rest.”

And so they all did.

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AlexWrites
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AlexWrites wrote a review Review · Sep 9

Hey Vent, I'm back for my daily dose of Loosely Lawful! Let's get into it~

eyes squeezed shut as she tried to avoid the oncoming headache of magical exhaustion

So using magic does have its repercussions! This bit was interesting, both for the sake of practicality and plot. It's obviously the more logical choice than the alternative, but it opens the door to some real expectations. You gotta keep up the struggles now, and drop related lore every now and then. Maybe sometime, the girls will be too exhausted to summon any magic at all, no matter how much the situation calls for it. Now I'm also curious as to what's the long term cost of magic, if any. Does it take away time or happiness from their lives, little by little every time they use it? How does it technically work and how does one go about possessing it? The explanation for shapeshifters such as Avon is long pending as well, definitely something the plot should expand on soon enough.

Benvolio’s fine shirt dripped with sweat and blood.

I'm not sure if this was intentional, but 'fine' made me think of slightly transparent, in a mildly seductive way. Did this mean to highlight his toned physique? A little unconventional for Benny as it's been more of Kyle's thing. But I quite like how you don't portray Benny as all helpless, which would be expected for his character. He's good in a forest, has some mysterious powers and doesn't really hold them now much. The reminder of his attractiveness is also most appreciated, he's definitely more than just a naive rich boy! My favorite for a reason =}

His whole back was opened up, split diagonally from shoulder to waist by three deep gashes that carved across the bones in his spine and scraped across his ribs.

Oh my, this is intense! Expectations of action come naturally with a series like this, but dealing with fatal wounds when things go south is going above and beyond! It's obvious that the protagonists would be less acquainted and comfortable in this instance, and thus it feels rewarding to see how they'd react and cope. Being medically accurate might be a concern to some, but I think it's fine either way as long as you can make your writing convincing.

Sera knelt at Kyle’s side.

It might just be my poetic mind thinking but this is gold! It can be interpreted in several ways, each beautiful in their own right. First, she's paying back Kyle for the time Kyle knelt to help her. She's being the friend he was, hoping she can be there for him as he was there for her. He's proved himself to her, now it's her turn. This scene is so much more impactful when compared to that one, since it's basically the same but the stakes are higher. We saw Kyle become mature and caring, got attached to him as a result, and thus the injury hits even harder. The sheer wickedness makes me hate you but I commend the clever thinking.
Next possibility being that she's getting on her knees in surrender or prayer. In reality, she does so to jump into action. But without context, one can suppose this is a symbolic/exaggerated way to show how much she really cares for Kyle. It's dramatic, cinematic even, and that works perfectly for me. I also saw it has her getting down from her high horse of complaining when it actually matters, and ultimately saving the day. The duality is amazing!

His shining silver hair was stained dark red as it fell in clumps across his cheeks.

He has silver hair? Somehow I failed to notice this before. Quite fitting for an unconventional character like him though. I also like how deep that makes the contrast of red against it! The imagery really got across to me here, good job.

she preferred brute force and power to mend Kyle on the rare occasion that she needed to

I feel like this tells us so much about her. First, that she might not be good with emotions. I get that I'm leaning a bit into the stereotypes here, but I believe I'm not far off, even if I happen to be wrong. She's not that good with healing- which translates to caring in a form. Thus, she struggles to show her love towards the people around her. None of our protagonist is much vocal about it, but they've got their ways. Avon helps around immensely with his shapeshifting ability, while Kali conveys it through her kindness. Benny is well, actually in love with everyone, and he shows that by straight up by blushing. Even a character as emotionally unavailable as Kyle cares- Kali quite literally, Benny by genuinely talking to him and Sera by prioritising her over the ladies and making sure she's alright and safe when she was tired that one time. But Sera- she pretty much draws her blank. If not for this scene, I might as well have guessed she doesn't care about anyone much. But when you see someone shaking at the threat to their friend's life, you know they care. And yet, she puts on a brave front to not lose Kyle- how amazing! :')

She reached inside her own soul, digging down for the very last dregs of magic in her, and tried to keep her eyes open.


Ohh she's pushing herself to the brink now, I love this for her character arc. I don't think I can give her the crown of my favourite ever, but I respect her immensely after this.

That's all for today, I loved this chapter! Keep writing, see you in the next chapter~

Love, Alex

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Liminality
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Liminality wrote a review Review · Mar 18

Hello again Vento!

Okay, wow, that was an intense scene. The first half of it had some humorous elements, like how the contract magic literally involves Sera shaking hands with Benvolius, but I could really feel the tension as they worked together to heal Kyle before they all ran out of magic. I was super impressed by how you've come up with mechanics for healing magic - it felt like the right balance between grounded and fantastical, too.

I'll go for some line comments and then give my overall thoughts/ predictions this time.

And Sera knew from experience that Avon’s magic didn’t work quite right for other people. 

This is interesting. I'm really keen to see why Avon's magic is different.

 Not unless Sera could find an excuse to bring more out of her connection to Librata.


I feel like we're really seeing how strategising and planning comes naturally to Sera even in moments of crisis, which is a very cool characterisation element.

but it placed the affair squarely in her goddess’s sphere of influence, which might allow Sera to draw more power than she currently had available.


This may just be my memory, but I wonder if we've seen Librata deny Sera in casting a spell before. I feel like we haven't gotten to that point yet, but the "might" seems to suggest that is a possibility for her.

Sera took his other hand and leaned in close, touching her forehead to his as the contract jumped out in her mind. The flutter of Librata’s spirt perked up inside her chest.


I love imagining the personality of this goddess as being very enthusiastic about contracts.

and Sera let it rise into her veins to tug at the deep green, pine-smelling power that lived in him. 


I've noticed you often give magic both a scent and colour in your stories, and I think that's a cool 'signature' of yours.

I will provide what is necessary to heal him, or what remains of my pool before I am tapped, whichever occurs first.


Is 'tapped' technical jargon in this setting, since it can appear in a contract, or is Sera allowed to be kind of colloquial when she makes contracts?

She unwound time on the damaged nerves over his spine, swallowing back bile as the fibers swung back and forth before snapping back into place as they had been before the cut.


This part was both eerie and fascinating. I like how each step of the healing process seems to involve a different kind of magic - the disinfecting seems to be done with that typical 'white glow' healing magic, but then there is also magic to grow back tissue, and then TIME magic for the nerves.

Sera had never been fantastic at all this medical junk; she preferred brute force and power to mend Kyle on the rare occasion that she needed to. 


This feels like Sera is underestimating/ minimising herself since we did just see her direct a whole surgery!

When she finished, she looked up at the others, her breaths coming short, her vision fuzzy. “Someone has to…”
“I’ll do it,” Avon said, standing. 

A cool moment for Avon to take initiative. I wonder what Sera was going to say, though.

I think Kyle is going to be okay in the next chapter after all this treatment. He might be a little more serious about the whole mission though, now that they've been through this terrifying battle.

This chapter establishes Sera as the leader of the group, building on the characterisation from last chapter. The other characters feel kind of quiet in this one, since we're mostly in Sera's head going through all the procedures they need to do, as compared to the more dialogue and banter-heavy chapters before the big battle sequence. I already liked Sera before, but I find her more impressive now!

It is cool, in a more understated way, how Kaliko and Benvolius cooperate with Sera to help Kyle. Benvolius has certainly shown himself to be brave even in the face of his nerves. I feel we already knew Kaliko was super competent from her first appearance, but hey, character consistency is always good :D

Overall, I enjoyed reading this chapter. I wonder how Avon will manage things while Sera is asleep/unconscious. It definitely feels like the team will need to seriously revise their view of their mission, which is turning out even more dangerous than they thought.

Hope this helps, and keep writing!
-Lim

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Tikaya
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Tikaya wrote a review Review · Mar 4

I know I should wait until other people also see the awesomeness that is Loosely Lawful but I cannot wait! Let’s see this aftermath of the creature!

Ah and I just remembered that last chapter I was really disappointed that they didn’t intend to fight the monster. Now I’m even more curious if they have a better justification for this decision now.

I like this description: “ like Librata’s spirit sat so low inside of her that she’d have to beg and cry to draw her back out.”

Oh what a gruesome description of Kyle’s wounds too! Very vivid!

Also love the description of how Sera calls on Librata here. Contract magic sounds so cool!
And also that Librata answers, yay!

And I like that Sera asks if everyone is on board with how she does the healing, in case someone is not comfortable.

I didn’t know I needed this description until I read it: “gross, microscopic wrigglies” I love this!

I do not like the spike of anxiety you gave me when Sera doesn’t finish this sentence: “Someone has to…”
Even if Avon says that he understood her, I cant help but feel anxious. What if they misunderstood. They are super serious and stuff and so the chance is low… I don’t know what she wanted so this makes me unhappy xd

Sera is definitely the star of this chapter. I like how she kept it together and how she quickly handed out tasks. Kali was a little subdued this chapter. Felt like everyone except for Kyle for obvious reasons had something critical to do and Kali’s impact was much lower than that of Beni and Avon in comparison.

Overall, this brightened my day and I’m happy that everyone made it out of the “fight” alright- I mean as alright as could be after how last ch ended.


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