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Hey Soxx
Awesome Poem you have here and I see you really have done a Good Job! xDD
Everyone loves it but iLoveMore ^^ ♥♥
Only think is that try not to use 'etc!etc!' in poems. MY POEM which didn't even rhyme at all >.< had "etc!etc!" and I showed it to Mini Ma'am :O
She said not to use it again but hey don't worry much about it. And I so AGREE WITH YOU!
Sorry has just become a WORD. Now it's never even bothered. Poor 'Sorry'
Loved it like hell !
4 ¾ / 5!
*claps*
Your's,
Lakshmi :')
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This stanza is very strong and I like it. You are getting the point across clearly and reading this stanza I can probably guess what the next paragraphs are going to be about.
This stanza to be honest wasn't as powerful and it didn't quite flow as well as others did. But! It did go good with each other.
This paragraph kind of confuses me, you used rhymes for the other stanzas above but chose not to here? To be completely honest the 'chocolate, bouquets, etc, etc!' was kind of random. I didn't see how it fit in to the rest of the poem.
I would of critiqued on how the meaning of sorry didn't make sense but you explained that which I thought was quite clever. The only thing this paragraph didn't quite need was the 'it is' after 'Well, thats the value of our 'sorry''.
I quite like this stanza although some spelling errors have occurred not just in this stanza but for example 'its' would be 'it's'.
I did like this poem and I hope you do more like this. I would appreciate it if you could review some of my work, but you don't have to it's fine. Well done and good luck in the future!
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This poem is so true! I mean, how many times are people really sorry for what they've done? "Sorry" means you won't do it again. Sorry has just become a word, or a temporary mending of feelings until the next mistake comes along. Very well written. I love this poem.
I really liked it. And it's true too! People used to say sorry and really mean it, but now they just say it. you did a good job of putting that in a few lines. Great Job!!
Nitpicky? Yes? Okay then :
I like the way this rhymes but do you really have to use the word 'word' three times? It sounds a little forced - see if you can find another word to put.
Good stanza, if maybe a little repetetive. Also, I would change the ; to an : (I think it's more grammatically correct)
Try not to use etc, etc in a poem. My english teacher told me that (and although this isn't an exam) examiners won't ever give you marks for it because it's lazy. Don't be lazy!
That's about it from me! Hope I wasn't too nitpicky
This is a very good and TRUE poem. I really liked it. You did a good job with it!
I found this poem very true. Sorry doesn't mean anything any more, it's literally just a word. I love how you made that very clear in the poem.
I love this verse, it is my favourite. And the last two lines are great, they sum up the whole poem really well, and I like how you use sorry in the way you explained we weren't meant to.
Good poem! Keep it up!
You don't know how much I agree with this. Sorry was a word that used to be the key to the foregrounds of forgiveness. Now? It's a cheap ticket to nowhere. What real value is there in Sorry? As you say. Nothing. Forgiveness can no longer be found in Sorry. Regret, wanting to repent, are all things that existed in the glowing heart of the word sorry. But it's almost as empty a word as 'love' is nowadays. You did a fantastic job at adding humanity in your approach. It doesn't exactly take a genius to understand. Everyone, wise and foolish can see the bare reality of this piece. You made it raw, you made it tasteful, you made it strong and more importantly you made it your own. Bravo. One thing I'm not sorry for, is taking the time to read this. I'll be sure to forward this to friends, too. This is great!