*I got the rhythm from about 15 seconds of a Coldplay song, Every Teardrop is a Waterfall, before the song bored me and I turned it off*
**I tried to symbolize how people these days, mostly business people, may act like they care about nature, but will eventually return to "civilization"**Corporate Earth
I watch the world outside
Give way to what's in store;
I see our nation divide,
Close the gap between the door.
You can speak the small birds' whistle
And embrace the browning owls' hoots;
Now break away from your missile
And shuck off your leopard fur boots.
I feel the top vultures' gaze
Burn dark holes into the sun;
I sense our short life's maze
Leaving all but room for fun.
You may heed the angry wind
And guide a stream down its road,
But let's see if you will bend
And return to your abode.
***Heed: Listen to
Abode: Home
Shuck: Slang; (1)to throw off [I don't know if there are other definitions for it]***
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Thats actually amazing, good job very good writting
I read it to the tune of every teardrops a waterfall, good job 
Thank you Desire & Ceely, your reviews were nice and helpful to my self esteem.
Bonjour Twin
First I’ll say, poetry isn't my forte and I don’t have anything bad to say because I found this sorta . . . . . Amazing! I absolutely love nature, so, I feel touched. =)
~Ceely
I'd have to agree with the first reviewer! You have such potential and I can see you growing so much as a writer in the future! This piece really is very good! Great imagery, awesome message portrayed! well done
Thank you, that's encouraging
Wow. This was actually really good! The symbolism completely blew me away! Wow. That's all I can say right now! And you're only fifteen? Great job! Keep writing!