Hello Again, My Friend!
It's me, Raven, and I'd like to review the next chapter in this great story using my Familiar method! Let's dive in, shall we? Heh heh heh...
What The Black Eyes See...
I loved being able to see how Edward communicates with other figures of authority in this world. It seems like he has a decent amount of pride, typical for a noble, and is also wary of cowardice and corruption among the ranks. The suspicious clues and traits about Derek were an awesome way to expand on the former Light's death and Edward's drastic action to get the throne, and the sudden interruption by the Envoy raised the stakes and made room for Matthew's side of the story to finally converge with this side. Let's get into the details though.
Where The Dagger Points...
I didn't really have any recommendations to make for this one! Good writing job ~
Why The Grin Widened...
It was fascinating to read how Edward handled the meeting. The way he clutched the tobacco pipe implied, perhaps, a sense of insecurity, uneasiness, maybe even anger. Yet as he's welcomed by the nobles around him...
A feeling of pride burned within Edward as he sat in the thirteenth seat.
He can at least take pride in his position and title. Intriguing contrast of responses, and again, I wonder where it will lead him...
Deep inside, Edward felt a spark of anger ignite. It was small but noticeable. The authority and power made Edward a prideful mortal. He suppressed that anger, trying his best not to let the spark turn into a great flame.
Oh no, that angry trait is coming back. But I feel like if he were to react out here, there would be a lot of trouble. And just by narrating it this way, it makes me wonder how long he'll be able to restrain himself...
Darek the Holy was his father's best friend and his master. He was the one who had taught him the ways of authority and power, and also the one Edward suspected to be behind his father's illness. He still remembered Darek’s face when his father was diagnosed with the illness—it was unlike anyone else's.
Now this sounds like an interesting character! At first it sounds like this could be taken in a positive way, a friend of the former Light who taught Edward about leadership, but with that note about Edward's suspicion and his response to the death...That is pretty strange to say the least. And especially since you used cold terms like 'power' and 'authority' to describe what he taught, maybe there is a sinister element to his history...
His face became complex with emotions of anger and sadness. Anger for the destruction they had caused all over the north—for the children they killed, the elderly they slaughtered, and the young boys and girls who suffered unimaginable wounds. Sadness for the situation of the Eclipse, as he and the nobles were aware of their suffering.
Ooo, this sounds like a deep and convoluted problem in the world already. Innocents killed and suffering all throughout the North because of the Eclipse, yet the Eclipse themselves are a pitiable type. It makes me wonder if any of this has to do with Allena and her side of the story, and of course, by extension, Matthew and his fate.
Edward noticed the subtle tone of humor that Darek tried to hide.
Alright, now I'm definitely suspicious of this guy, if -hidden or not- this is the reaction.
“News came from the north about a boy, a demonic boy who seems to wield some kind of magic. He killed the village elder when he was about to be witch-burned,” he reported.
Well, that answered one of my questions haha. Wow! Matthew is being reported to the Light himself now! Whether this is good or bad, and how much either way, I don't know what to think -though seeing the tensions and troubles among this group, I lean toward bad.
“Send word to the envoy. Tell—no, order him to capture that demonic boy. If he is set free, who knows what destruction he might cause,” Edward's voice echoed through the hall.
Ooo, I wonder what he meant by "Holder" and likewise, what he will do once Matthew is captured (if he is). Seeing the reaction among these powerful people, it really makes it feel like Matthew's significance is even greater than we first thought!
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Conclusions, personal rating, and a quick goodbye.

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