This Shouldn't Be Possible! [Ch. VI, Nine]

Hi Rebel!
It’s been a while but eventually, random chance will get to you =D
Ok where were we…
I remember. =.=
Let’s see how we handle this “edgy” thing here.

But at least we have Six narrating. Already very pacifying.
I think Six is not as stupid as ppl make her out to be. It just takes her longer to get there. Tho even I don’t know what the word perturbatory means. Uhm Six maybe it’s time to do a “word of the day” thing to broaden your vocabulary with actually existing words…

I know you want to create chaos and it is working and that especially Six has no idea what is going on… BUT I DON’T EVEN KNOW WHERE THEY ARE! Like no idea what the surroundings look like and who is there. And because everyone is using their nicknames and gamer tags most of the time I don’t even understand it if they mention it in ~dialogue~. That does not result in a happy Tikaa :/

Also… isn’t Six a fan of Holmes? So she would recognize him on sight? But instead we have her describe him as having a Holmes-looking hat. So either it’s not Holmes and she is not where Nine was last chapter. Or this is not Holmes. And the fact that I cannot tell is not good. I am getting less happy.

Ah never mind. She really did not recognise him. Well that is that then :/
I am still hesitant to lay the blame on Six here (confusing sit, personal bias)—I am just very lost right now, Rebel :/

Okay I am not very inspired by the dialogue. You know I don’t like it when it is just endless stream of tagless dialogue with no descriptions and this is just peak…that. It makes it really hard for me to a) ascertain if anything actually plot-relevant and not just comedy-relevant is happening and b) retain any of the information you want to convey here.

who knows what he’ll do when he finds out about Nine - he will probably annihilate all existence!

What exactly do you want to say with this entire paragraph? We already know Zero is watching and hyper invested in Nine. So we know he wouldn’t let Nine die. In case these bozos are unable to find him, Zero would intervene. I know it is realistic for them to panic. But the way you go about it just makes it more and more apparent that Zero is the bad guy who will destroy existence on a whim or rather that everyone who works for him thinks that. And we already knew that. We the readers already know that everyone is afraid of Zero doing just that- so on top of there being zero tension (hehe) in this scene it’s not even doing anything new :/

I rly appreciate that the characters explain why Six is the one who needs to trace Nine’s Field even if she has no idea how to do it. That is well-done.

“Search for him while I teach Agent Six how to detect Field Signatures.” That is also really good. Have 4 and 5 do this, they might get lucky while Six is learning this. I like it.

The manga, the movie, or the anime?
“THE SENSE!”

THIS works for me. I had to grin at that =D

I… I haven’t really noticed… to be honest…
“You are hopeless…”

And that is super uncalled for. If she never needed to look for it why blame her for not noticing? Very very conceited of Eight. [But I guess he has to think like that, what with being Disappointment]

Aww after all this, she doesn’t even get to learn how to track field signatures. I am very eighted over this.

“Pythagoras can even revive the dead” Hmmm but not Leonardo. I wonder if that is because his ~soul~ has already chosen a new body (Nine’s) or if something else is going on. Are you gonna do this extremely stupid “fixed point in the timeline that cannot be changed no matter how hard you try” thing?

Wait I am so so confused. I thought she left the diary in her and Nine’s room so she is reading the diary in that room. And I thought they left Nine in that room too?
Or did Sherlock take him to the gardens? Where was this? WHAT LINE SAYS THIS?

All in all a very frustrating chapter :/

Hi TheRebel! Dropping by to give you a review. first off, I do see that this is meant to be a humorous story and is written in a lax, comedically style, so I will not be providing any grammatical feedback (unless I think that you didn't intend to make a typo) and instead just giving you my overall impression of the chapter. Also, I apologize but I did not read the previous chapters. I hope I can still provide you with some helpful feedback.


... Alright, well... you see... I'm not really sure what I can tell you about this LOL it's definitely something I have never seen before! So that's pretty cool. Though I could not tell you what this is about, and I think it would be that way even if I had read this from the start >_> there's a lot going on here. Again, it seems like a really cool concept, but I was confused the entire time because I could not make heads or tales of what was happening. For starters, are these all just voices inside someone's head? Doesn't seem so - at least, not everyone, like Sherlock Holmes. But for the others that go by numbers, are those all the same person? Or are these just all voices? Hard to say.

I do find it interesting how majority of this chapter was written in dialogue, and the parts that weren't technically dialogue were still communication of some kind, as it was the narrator essentially communicating back with the voice prior that was speaking. That's so cool and I never considered doing that, to be honest.

I did enjoy some of the silliness of this chapter, such as the different languages and the backwards text. This was my favorite part of it all:

Nani?! Wh- wha- WHAT JUST HAPPENED?!!! And- OW! Owowowowowowowowow!!! Why does my head feel like it’s banging - OW! - through layers of cem - OW - hundreds of layers of cement every secon - OW! - second. Why does - Oow! - Why is the sky turning blue and orange and violet every couple of seconds - OW! - Why does my body feel like it’s being cut and bruised a million times over every second? WHAT IS EVEN HAPPENING ANYMORE?!

!?EROMYNA GNINEPPAH NEVE SI TAHW ?dnoces yreve revo semit noillim a desiurb dna tuc gnieb s???ti ekil leef ydob ym seod yhW - !WO - sdnoces fo elpuoc yreve teloiv dna egnaro dna eulb gninrut yks eht si yhW - !woO - seod yhW .dnoces - !WO - noces yreve tnemec fo sreyal fo sderdnuh - WO - mec fo sreyal hguorht - !WO - gnignab s???ti ekil leef daeh ym seod yhW !!!wowowowowowowowowO !WO -dnA !!!?DENEPPAH TSUJ TAHW -ahw -hW !?inaN

I usually dislike quoting bulk parts of the story in my reviews but these two paragraphs were just too funny for me to not mention. I actually laughed when I realized what was happening!

Overall, this was really interesting and I think it has a lot of potential! I truly hope you find the target audience for this because it's really unique and creative. I wish you luck with your future writing endeavors.

~ Iggy

Hi there, Jit! I hope you're doing well? Again, sorry it took me so long to get to this, but I'm so glad I could today! I'd forgotten how much I love your writing and missed your characters! ^^

Often when I'm reading something I'm going to review, I don't usually get sucked into the story, but this chapter definitely trapped me in and when reading, it was suddenly over and I got sad. And I got even more sad when I realized this is the last chapter you have published at the moment, so I can't even go and read more!

Your grasp on character's voices is incredible! Each chapter with a different perspective is different and yet consistent with the characters, which I find extremely difficult to pull off, myself. And within the chapters, it's also so easy to know which character is which, but not only that, the characters are also interesting. I love four's speech, it's very in character and it's so different. Also, I think you nailed Sherlock's voice, that's exactly as I imagine he'd speak.

Anyway, onto the actual review!

This shouldn’t be possible! Wa-What? How? Why? Wha- Nani?! What is this feeling? I feel - I feel like I am being stretched in and out repeatedly like - l-li-like a pendulum or something (You aren’t really good at similes, are you?) Oh shut up myself!

I wonder if Nine-kun’s alright - that boy never listens to me! But I still don’t understand what’s this weird feeling. Like, I am not a scientist or naturalist or stuff but - this, this - like, it feels like space itself is warping around me - or maybe that’s what Nine would have said, at least I think so.

*Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop*

“Mahanaadasansarasyeva advitiyamsarvasyasya”

“This doth speak not of good omens to come.”

Wait, what’s going on? Who are these people? Nan-?

“Sí, sabes que ya llevo un rato mirándote-”

“Oh shut up Luis, this is serious business.”

*Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop*

“Why’d Sherlock tell us to-” “This is strange.” “ Er thetta mithpunktur-? ” “Pythaoppojafd?” “Inoniamo kuali” “Oh no shi-”

Nani?! What’s going on? Who are y’all? What’s going on? Like, what-?

“Young lady, please calm down.”

Right away we start with the title - or rather, the reason the title is the way it is. I love it when the title is created from something within the text, and I find it especially fun when it's something word for word within the chapter. I also still love the diary and the way Six keeps getting angry at herself! It's so funny, and I love seeing this again! Reminds me of one of the past chapters last time Six was the narrator. I also love the huge multitude of "*Swoop*"s, I find it so funny, especially when you keep doing it later on in the chapter. I laughed out loud, it was great! XD

What is happening? Who are all these people? Who are you? What is this per - what’s the word again? - oh yes - what is this weird perturbatory feeling that’s been drilling my head? Like, I am feeling so dizzy and-

“Listen, dear Miss Six, we are fellow Field Wielders. We are here to control the impact of these gravitational waves that have the potential to rip apart multiple universes. Now, if you’ll excuse me-”

Wait, who are you? Do I know you? How do you know my name? Hey wait!

“Six, what’s going on?”

Oh, Ni-kun! Who are all these people? And what are they all doing here? And how does that Victorian-looking guy with the Holmes hat know me? And how’s Kyu-kun?! Is he alright? And what about all the peo-?

“Calm down, Six! That’s a lot of questions! And I don’t even know the answers to half of them! I am as much in the dark as you are! The only thing I can say about these guys is that, uh, how do I articulate this?”

What is it about these guys, Two?

“They, eh… tipo… - They don’t exactly feel like they belong here.”

What do you mean?

“I don’t know, like, no lo so, but they feel foreign to me - their very presence feels foreign. Like, they are not from this universe - at least their Field Signature suggests that to me.”

NANI?! What are you talking about?! And what’s Field Signature? And - you mean to say that - all these people, like hundreds of - if not thousands of - these guys gathered in this park are Field Wielders from other universes?! There are other universes? So, Nine wasn’t just trippin’ when he was talking wack about other universes while talking about his Theory of Everything and quantum physics and stuff.

“Io have no clue what you’re talking about but I have to go and find Nine. It took me some time to recover from my injuries after being slapped by that 5D reptile, but I assure you - I’ll find him.”

I love Fury just demanding for explanations here and just being so flustered and confused - those emotions really show through her words and actions, and it's fun to be confused with her as we try to figure out what's going on right along side her. Also, I just love how Six was convinced that Nine was making stuff up about other universes and such and now she's basically like, "WAIT THAT'S TRUE?!" which I think is so funny and also so in character for her. Also, I love the interactions between Two and Six, with them being so close and yet their emotions still shine through. Compared to Six's interactions with the other Field Wielders, you can definitely tell Six and Two know each other (if that somehow was not something you knew before , heh). What I'm saying is, a lot of authors create characters that "know" each other, but the author doesn't know them, so the author can't write dialogue between them very well, because to the author, they just met. You don't have a problem with either aspect - it's obvious you know your characters and your characters know each other! It's a great skill to have, and you do it masterfully.

*Swoop* *Swoop*

“What on Earth is going on here?!”

“Ha! I have no idea! But look at all these people, Miss Frustration, they all look so different with so many different emotions and feelings. This is gonna be so fun and- !”

*Swoop*

“Agents Seven and Five, please look at the matter at hand and stop chattering.”

“As you say, Master Disappointment!”

Hey you guys, what’s going on here?! Who are these guys-!

“Oh, look at that! It’s our Furious Six! Hello there, I have-”

*Swoop*

“Agent. Five. I. Would. Like. You. To. Hold. Your. Horses. And. Take. A. Look. At. The. Grave. Situation. We. Are. In.”

“Why so serious all the time, bro? Like, seriously speaking, Four, you shouldn't be so gloomy all the time.”

You twins can chat later, can anyone tell me what's going on? Who are these guys and why am I feeling like a stirred cup of coffee?

“It’s funny, Fury, ‘coz we have no idea either!”

*BOOM* *ZAP*

What’s that sound? Wha - What… what is that? What is that… light?

I still love Four's way of speaking. It's too good I have no idea why I like his so much. XD I really like Six's analogy of feeling like a stirred cup of coffee; it's really good imagery and just creative in general. I love that.

I have no idea how messed up my auto-diary is by now but I hope it’s blank after this or there are gonna be a lotta grammatical mistakes in my thoughts themselves. Like, I feel like vomiting - and, and my head’s spinning out of control. Like, I really wanna stop the auto-diary, but damn it, I don’t even know how to!

Like, it feels like time has stopped and nothing’s moving except that ginormous I-dunno-how-many-kilometres-wide-light spanning across my eyes - like it’s the only thing I can see, it covers the entire sky and horizon. It’s even turned the night to lightning-like… uh… what’s the word again? - Whatever, the sky basically looks like untempered lightning everywhere.

Oh wait, it doesn’t just feel like time has stopped, it has legit stopped - like that leaf has literally stopped in mid-air. And, nothing’s moving but us Field Wielders! Just what the heck is that light?

*Zap* *BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM*

Nani?! Wh- wha- WHAT JUST HAPPENED?!!! And- OW! Owowowowowowowowow!!! Why does my head feel like it’s banging - OW! - through layers of cem - OW - hundreds of layers of cement every secon - OW! - second. Why does - Oow! - Why is the sky turning blue and orange and violet every couple of seconds - OW! - Why does my body feel like it’s being cut and bruised a million times over every second? WHAT IS EVEN HAPPENING ANYMORE?!

!?EROMYNA GNINEPPAH NEVE SI TAHW ?dnoces yreve revo semit noillim a desiurb dna tuc gnieb s???ti ekil leef ydob ym seod yhW - !WO - sdnoces fo elpuoc yreve teloiv dna egnaro dna eulb gninrut yks eht si yhW - !woO - seod yhW .dnoces - !WO - noces yreve tnemec fo sreyal fo sderdnuh - WO - mec fo sreyal hguorht - !WO - gnignab s???ti ekil leef daeh ym seod yhW !!!wowowowowowowowowO !WO -dnA !!!?DENEPPAH TSUJ TAHW -ahw -hW !?inaN

“My fellow Field Wielders, I apologise for the inconvenience, but this was a necessary predicament to prevent the destruction of several billion worlds. I reversed time but changed the causality of events in a way such that the gravitational wave-blast still happened but the fabric of reality wasn't broken.”

I think this is my favorite part of this chapter. It's very funny in more ways than I can count, and it's incredibly interesting. Like, first Six comments about how messed up her diary must be by now, which acts as a nice little break from the action and also as a way to address the chaos that just ensued. And then how she comments how it feels like time has stopped, in more of a metaphorical sense, and then she's like, oh, wait, it actually did. I didn't notice at first, but the section that's full of gibberish is actually very cool, and reflects perfectly what just happened, with the reversal of time and all. How long did it take to type that out? I hope not long...

…

… …

… … …

WHAT IS EVEN HAPPENING?! WHO ARE YOU?! WHAT THE HELL DID YOU DO?!

“Miss Six, please release my collar. And I request you to calm dow-”

AND HOW THE HELL DO YOU KNOW MY NAME?! I DON’T EVEN KNOW YOU!

“I feel your deep distraught and I beg your pardon for that. Let me introduce myself. I am Sherlock Holmes, private detective and Chief of Halcyon. We are, in your words, ‘Field Wielders’ who deal with dangers that threaten spacetime itself.”

Well, that introduction was a bit too cringe for my taste… This guy gotta watch some anime for better intros… Wait a sec… NANI?! WHAT DID HE SAY HIS NAME WAS?!

Are you Sherlock Holmes?! THE Sherlock Holmes?!

“I beg your pardon, but I could not understand your question. I just stated that my name is Sherlock Ho-”

No, like - are you THE Sherlock Holmes?! The famed solver of A Study in Scarlet?! The guy who chased criminals on a cool motorboat scene before chase scenes were cool?! The guy who helped retrieve British submarine blueprints?! The guy who’s written a book on bees and also aware of all the different varieties of tobacco?! Are you THAT Sherlock Holmes?!

“Well, Miss, I have no clue how you are aware of my life events but indeed, I am the very same Sherlock Holmes standing by you. Nevertheless, to come to the issue at hand, I would like to discuss some things. Who is the chief of the Field Wielders in this world?”

Let’s say - he is out of town. Anyway, I am your BIGGEST fan! I have memorized every single story of yours word by word! I have a poster of every person who has ever portrayed any version of you throughout history! And I-

“Miss, please calm down - believe me, I am as excited and fascinated as you are, but my primary work is to know what exactly caused all of this. Now, if you’ll excuse me.”

Wait, sir!

“Don’t. Six.”

Wh-What is this pressure? Why do I feel I’m being squeezed out like a tomato? This is just like Gloom - oh, it’s Gloom!

Hey, Gloomy-kun! Stop this! It hurts! Shi-kun! Yamete!

“Shut. Up. This. Is. Serious. Business.”

“Bro, why are you always so serious? Calm down, relax!”

“I. Am. Not. Always. This. Serious. Glee. My. Brother. My. Speech. Pattern. Changes. When. I. Am. Super. Serious.”

“Huh? Never noticed that…”

“You. Are. Too. High. To. Notice. Stuff. Five.”

“And you are too sad to enjoy stuff, Four!”

“Everything. Is. Meaningless. So. Why?”

“Everything is meaningless, so why not?!”

*Smack* “Ouch!” *Smack* “Ouch.”

“I told you all to stop chattering, now shut up. Agent Two!”

“Yeah, Eight?”

“As the strongest among us, talk with them about what’s going on, Agent Two. They seem powerful, but I am not sure if they are friends or foes.”

“Sure. But they seem like friends to me.”

The moment of pause before Six starts yelling is priceless XD. And the way Sherlock calmly explains everything adds to the humor - the contrast between the two characters is also just really fun. The Six lore of loving Sherlock Holmes and memorizing so much and having so many posters is so funny to me, but it also adds more to her character! Knowing what a character is a fan of and loves is definitely fun to see! I assume Four and Eight were the ones talking? Correct me if I'm wrong. I love their little banter, it's very fun to read and also gives us a better look at who they are, and how they act around people they know.

“I just want to be sure - by the way, Agent Six?”

Yeah, what is it?

“Where’s Nine? Last time I saw him, he was with you.”

Actually… Uh… You see… Etto… Um…

“What?”

Nine- kun… uh… He went off to fight that monster… I haven’t seen him since…

“WHAT?!”

Look, I am sorry! He just wooshed off all of a sudden… And I was kinda injured then… So I couldn’t really control him… I hope he’s okay…

“Damn it! I hate teenagers!"

Uh, aren't you younger than me though-?

"He is the youngest and the most inexperienced of us! Do you have ANY idea what could happen if he dies or if he falls into the enemy’s hands?! He’s Zero’s favourite! And Zero is extremely unpredictable, who knows what he’ll do when he finds out about Nine - he will probably annihilate all existence! YOU DUMB-”

Listen, I am so sorry! What could I have done?! He just went off!

“Alright, it’s now your duty to find him ASAP.”

But how?!

“Trace his Field Signature.”

What the hell is that?

“…Seriously…? -_-”

Uh… Is that something I am supposed to know…?

“That is something every decent Agent is supposed to know!”

I guess I am not a decent Agent then…

“This is no time for self-pity, Six. *Facepalm*”

I am sorry…

“Like, I could do it myself, but it would take me literal days. You are with him almost all the time, so you should have less problems identifying his Field. That’s why I’m asking you.”

I am so sorry, Eight-kun, I didn’t even know there was a thing called ‘Field Signature’ before this…

“You know what? Agent Four! Agent Five!”

“Yeah?” “Yeah.” [in unison]

“Go search for Nine in Earth’s sphere of influence - we really don’t need another apocalypse right now, especially one caused by Zero, a being of infinite power.”

“Uh, that’s a really big area, Eight! It might take several days! Several twenty-four hours! Several sixty-times-twenty-four minutes! Several three-thousand-six-hundred-times-twenty-four seconds! Several-”

“I know, Agent Five, I know. But that’s our only course of action right now. Search for him while I teach Agent Six how to detect Field Signatures.”

“Alright, Eight!” “Alright. Eight.” [in unison] *Swoop* *Swoop* [in unison]

This whole scene of Six getting questioned as to where Nine is, not knowing, being told to trace his Field Signature, and not knowing is so funny to me in a way I can't explain. This whole interaction, by the way, is done really well. It reads smoothly and is paced appropriately. I also love Five going into detail about how long it will take in the silliest way - splitting the numbers into different numbers to say the same thing in such a happy way perfectly fits Glee. I also didn't notice before, but I love how Glee and Gloom are twins - it's the perfect irony and I love how their emotions both start with G. It's actually perfect XD

“Now, Fury, what does Nine smell like?”

What? Ew, I didn’t know you are into that stuff…

*Facepalm* “No, I am NOT into that stuff. I am asking if you know what Nine feels like - Wait no, that sounds even worse - Do you know what Nine tastes - Wait no, that sounds even more worse - Alright, just tell me what Nine sounds like.”

Uh, Nine… sounds like Nine?

“Why do I have to deal with all the weirdos…? Alright, listen, Six. Have you ever heard of the Sixth Sense?”

The manga, the movie, or the anime?

“THE SENSE!”

Oh… uh, yes, I have, yes.

“Don’t you feel something different when you are with other Field Wielders?”

Uh… not really…? Like, I am with Field Wielders all the time, so I can’t really say…

“What about when you go to your concerts? Doesn’t the atmosphere feel a bit different there than when you are with other Field Wielders?”

I… I haven’t really noticed… to be honest…

“You are hopeless…”

*Swoop*

“There is no need to find him anymore, Ms. Six and Mr. Eight.”

Oh, Mr. Holmes!

“What do you mean by that, Sir Holmes?”

“Mr. Two has gone to retrieve Mr. Nine who is currently levitating in a comatose state a hundred thousand miles away from the Earth after releasing energy equivalent to several dozen universes in the form of gravitational waves.”

“Wha-what?” N-Nani?! [in unison]

*Swoop*

“Sherlock Holmes, sir!”

“Yes, Mr. Ramanujan?”

“You won’t believe what I’ve found! Just check this gravitational data, it’s even more stupid than we imagined!”

*Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* [in unison]

“Yeah, Albert, but listen to me-” “Signor Galilei, this can’t be true-” “Archimedes! No-!” “This makes less sense than my Incompleteness Theorem-” “Rutherford and Faraday have gone mad, this can’t be-” [in unison]

*Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* *Swoop* [in unison]

“Heisenberg, are you certain about this-?” “No, this can’t be-!” “Maxwell, help me-!” “Holy cow, hell no-!” “My brain’s hurting-” “WHAT THE HELL IS THIS DATA-!?” “Mr. Teddy, we are screwed-” “This graph is high-” “Why did I choose Physics as my major…?” “This is more jank stuff than pilot waves-!” “Sherlock, listen please-!” [in unison, followed and accompanied by utter chaos]

The swoops! I can't... >< I'm trying so hard not to laugh right now. And the way that long chain of swooping just ends in "in unison" is actually perfect I love it so much XD Also, the whole interaction of Eight trying to get Six to find Nine is just pure awesomeness. Also, I love that Mr. Ramanujan describes the data as "stupid" rather than anything else. Data is usually described as strange or interesting or something of that, but it's so different for it to be called stupid, which makes this story even more ridiculous (in a silly way) and awesome.

“Ladies and Gentlemen, I would like to request you to calm down and address your concerns to me. What exactly happened?”

[noise of science-guys-scampering-over-themselves-and-screaming-and-shouting-violently]

“Only one, please. It would be great if it’s the most intelligent of you.”

[Murmur followed by silence]

*Ba-dum, tsh-tsh* *Ba-dum, tsh-tsh* *Ba-dum, tsh-tsh* *Ba-dum, tsh-tsh*

Where does that music come from and what are all the nerds so excited about?

*Ts-ts-tsh, ts-ts-tsh*

That sounds like some 90s hip-hop music opening.

*Bling-bling* *Bling-bling*

Wait, I have heard this music before, but where?

*Bling-bling* *Bling-bling*

Wait, NO WAY! Don’t tell me it’s Mich-!

*Swoop*

“It was more like a fluty sheen from the cosmic scene/ I said don’t mind, but what do you mean, this is the one/ Whose expanse - *dum* - sawed the floor - *dum* - to the ground? It said, he is the one - who’d caused - *dum* - all the worlds - *dum* - to resound - ”

“Michael, please, in English.”

“C’mon, Sherlock, that’s no fun!”

“Please, I request you, I do not understand the Pop Music language.”

“Alright Mr. Boring Guy - We were analyzing the Grav. waves when we found that they were emanating from a guy drifting in space, and they caused black holes to form - and the thing is, black holes, which usually forms due to compression of matter, legit formed in forty-nine locations due to compression of Grav. waves themselves - and it’s wild.”

“I do not understand the significance of the fact in its entirety, however, this sounds impressive. Have we found the location of the person emanating th-?”

“Yeah, wait just a sec.” *Swoop* “Here he is.”

Nine! Kyu-kun! Are you alrigh-?

“Please be silent, Miss Fury. Let me check him.”

Alright, Mr. Holmes…

He… doesn’t really look good… I… DAMN MYSELF, I SHOULD HAVE STOPPED HIM - It’s alright, Six, he went of his own free will - But still, he’s hurt! - He’ll be fine, shinjite! - As you say… myself.

“All those years with Watson tells me that this boy doesn’t look well. But, where’s Mr. Two who was supposed to bring Mr. Nine back?”

*Swoop*

“Io am here. Thanks for finding Nine.”

"No problem, dude!"

“All right, then! Let’s see… he has no pulse, this is not good… He shows minimal brain activity, this is worse…”

“OH NO - This is not good! If Nine dies, Zero will probably wipe out everything-”

*Swoop*

“ Minime, amice, I won’t. Et, don’t worry, Eight - Nine is not going to die.”

*Swoop*

“Mr. Eight, who was that? A familiar of yours?”

“Yes, he’s the most powerful bastard in reality.”

Yeah, Mr. Holmes, let’s talk about him later, shall we?

I love the sounds in this section - specifically the way you describe the noises of the science guys and Michael playing the 90s hip-hop music (and asking Beethoven to play later on). It's all so funny. I think that's what's really unique about your story - it has a lot of serious ideas as a baseline, with power and death everywhere, but it's all told in a very humorous light, which is very different and interesting. It sets you apart from other writers I know in a special way. Also, Nine not having a pulse and not much brain activity is!!!! Concerning!!! But ohhh, this is where he wakes up, isn't it? In the previous chapter! Oh that's actually a really nice connection. It brings Six's and Nine's stories together very nicely!

“Although he piques my interest, I’ll believe what you say, Ms. Six, and I’ll do as you wish, Mr. Eight. Now, where’s Pythagoras? Any idea, Michael?”

“He’s probs’ dozing off som’where.”

*Snap*

*Snore*

*Facepalm* *Snore continues*

“He’s never gonna change, is he? Hey, Beethoven!”

*Swoop*

“Ja, Michael?”

“Play ya’ Square Root of 2 Symphony.”

“In Ordnung!”

*Music*

*SCREAMS* “AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHH!! PAUOUUUUUUUUUUUUUEEEEE!! STOPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPP!!”

*Music stops*

“Good morning, Pythagoras!”

“May Zeus strike you down, Michael! You criminal!”

“A smooth criminal, indeed, Pythagoras. Now, sir, if you have yawned enough, may I request you to look after this boy - he is extremely injured. If Watson were here, I would have told him to do it but-”

“Asphalos, I will help you only because this boy looks almost dead - I will get you one day, Michael, I swear on Ares-”

“Please, Pythagoras. I, Sherlock Holmes, swear an oath that I will torture Michael Jackson in a time loop for you.”

“Wait, wha-? Sherlock, what the f-?”

“Well then, I’ll get on to it!”

Will he be alright, Mr. Holmes?

“Don’t worry, Miss Six. Pythagoras can even revive the dead. And it seems Nine is still alive, even if barely, he’ll be alright.”

That’s - That’s overpowered -

“Go and rest for a bit, I’ll inform you when he gains consciousness. By the by, where does Nine feel the most comfortable? The more comfortable he feels, the sooner will he get better.”

I guess that’d be our home in Rome.

“Well, then.” *Snap* “Here, we are. Where is Mr. Nine’s room?”

Wait, how can you just do it like that-? You make it seem like nothing!

“Well, practice makes a man perfect, you see. By the way, where is Mr. Nine’s- ?”

That was kinda sexist.

“I beg your pardon?”

Maybe they used this phrase back in the 1800s but we use the phrase: ‘Practice makes a person perfect’ - it’s more gender-neutral, it sounds better, and also has good - uh, what was the word again? Something-teration?

“Alliteration.”

Oh yeah, alliteration, that’s the word Nine said.

*Swoop* “Don’t be a Karen, Sexta.” *Swoop*

Shut up, Zero, you bastard!

“Who exactly is this Agent Zero, Miss Six?”

He is a malevolent, overpowered guy who only cares about fun and ‘haha, sixty-nine number funny’.

“How powerful is he, exactly?”

Can’t say, honestly - probably as powerful as you can imagine, or I guess even more powerful than even your imagination. He can do the most stupid stuff and get away with it just because he is that powerful - like farting all over a 5D universe.

“I… cannot even comprehend that potentiality.”

I love the addition of all these historical and fictional people and characters - and your interpretations of them are very spot on, at least in my book! I love Pythagoras's reference to his own mythology. "Like farting all over a 5D universe" - foreshadowing for the next chapter?? Also, Six commenting how overpowered it is that Nine is still alive after pretty much being dead is hilarious and a nice semi fourth wall break? In a way, it's attesting to the crazy amount of over-powered characters this story has, which honestly suits this so well. Zero randomly popping in and saying stuff like "don't be a Karen" is so him and also so funny, it's actually awesome. Although I think he's awful as a person, as a character he's very entertaining, and I'm starting to like him more, too. (I think Six and Nine will always be favorites for me, though )

Anyway, let me take you to our room. *Tap tap on the floor*

*Tap tap is followed by tap tap*

“By ‘our’, whom are you speaking of, exactly?”

Nine and me.

“Oh.”

I wonder what he thinks about Nine and me living in the same room… Damn, I hope he doesn’t think that I’m a degenerate - but you are a degenerate - oh shut up! - No you - No you, you - No you, you, you - just shut up, you imbecile! - You know that you’re calling yourself an imbecile, right? - JUST SHUT UP GAHHHH!!!

*Low scribbling noise*

So, Mr. Holmes, here is our room - wait, what’s that sound?

*Scribble scribble*

Wait a minute - DON’T TELL ME THAT I’VE LEFT THE AUTO-DIARY ON THE FLOOR IN FRONT OF MY ROOM!!!!

“What happened, Miss-?”

Oh… it’s nothing, Mr. Holmes. Just wait a minute… You can go to the Hanging Gardens meanwhile, it’s just beyond that corridor. Nine loves that place too.

“As you say, Miss Six.”

*Tap tap sounds slowly fading away*

Alright, now that he’s gone I can read this in peace. Now, I really hope no one read this while I was gone - Wait, lemme read the diary.

*Sounds of pages flapping* *Scribble*

Oh, so, it doesn’t register stuff when I’m reading? That’s… weird. I thought it did - wait, let’s try something. *Zoink*

Let me read my chats…

Nine: Did you know? The last time someone tried to fashion a lizard into a voluptuous velociraptor-bot -

Hai? It registers the chat but not the diary itself, that’s weird… Is the diary broken?

*Swoop* “Id est not a bug, it is a feature, Sexta.” *Swoop*

STOP PEEPING ON ME FROM ANOTHER DIMENSION, YOU JERK!

Anyway, let me read the diary… What the heck, a diary like this is never gonna compare to Nine’s… I mean, I should have expected this, to be honest. Sigh.

“Miss Six, Nine is awake. You may come.”

Wait - what the hell was that?

“I am sorry for the surprise, but I am currently communicating telepathically. We are in the middle of the Hanging Gardens.”

Alright, I’m coming.

Yokatta! Kyu-kun is alright! Thank God! Now, it’s time to scold him for being so rash. And damn, I can’t show this diary to anyone, it’s too cringey. Gotta learn to control my emotions more - You can’t, you are literally the embodiment of anger - Oh shut up, me! Don’t undermine myself, myself! Yeah, yeah, whatever.

And we end really nice here - bringing it back to the beginning with the diary and Six getting at least a little break. I really like the addition of the scribbling sounds for it, as well. It's kind of funny to imagine scribbling during this whole chapter, as the chapter is literally the diary writing everything down. Also, how Six says she'll never show the diary to anyone, and yet it's up on YWS for all to see is very silly and another little 4th wall break that I love.

This is still such and amazing story, and still an exciting and awesome read! It should not have taken me this long to get to everything, but thank you for being so very patient and kind with me! I truly do enjoy your writing so much, and it made me sad when I didn't have the time or energy. If you decide to continue this series, I'd love to keep reading and be notified, if you'd like! And even if you don't continue, I hope you'll keep writing. You have a knack for characters and humor, and I'd hate to see it go to waste.

Thank you so much for asking me along to read, this has been amazing and I hope I'll continue to see your characters, but even more, you! around. ^^ I hope your day is as incredible as you, and that your headache will pass and things will get better. <3