Everyday i look in the mirror
and i see my self.
And today to my horror,
i found my self.
The horror lies within
my self.
I discovered the bully
inside this little cutie.
I finally felt the scars
that this tongue had carved.
I felt the misery
that this attitude had given
to many many
innocent people.
I led to a dumb little girl
into the pool of sins.
What i thought was cool
was just junk in the bin.
And now, i confess
the devil residing in here;
in this little heart:
corrupting the soul
of a little girl.
My little self.
I look away from the mirror,
I put on the "evil me" mask.
I try to hide the human
i turn into a beast
just to be like the rest!
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I really like this poem of what it is about and how clear the message is. In the thirteenth sentence it says "many" twice so you might want to fix that. Also in the eight line the wort "cutie" just doesn't fit in with the who entire script so you might want to change that into something more like "girl" or just change it into " the bully trapped inside me". I really like how you used the word mask to describe us covering up our feelings.
Thanks a tonne! and i will surely try to fix it!!
I like this so on the 13th line it said many twice and that didn't flow with the rest of it. the main body of it flowed very well. and i like how this has a very good moral to it of how we hid who we are and try to be something else because of low self confidence. The reality is that all humans are beasts!(haha) well that is until we take our masks off. I really like how this flows
! it rolls off the tongue like butter!
Thanks a bunch! that was truly really very encouraging!!
I like the concept of this poem. You are probably right about society. Generaly every single individual human is good but lie you said we put our masks on and try to fit in evilness. As for form of this poem you could try making a bit longer stanza, as they would left readers with more powerful ideas. In overall very good idea, kinda well written... So you just keep writing and be yourself.
Thanks! that really encouraged me!
You are evil, I am evil. Now you realize it. It's a good thing you realized it at this point.
The truth of the matter is we do evil deeds because life would be boring otherwise. You ever hear a philosopher say "Humans are just animals?" That's the objective interpretation. Anton la Vay is known for saying "Evil spelled backwards says Live."
We're all Sinners, whether you believe in God or not.
And it's not the reflection in the mirror that displays who you really are. The light reflecting off the surface just demonstrates that radiant being within you that like to create mischief.
Your comment mesmerized me! Like really mate, you must write blogs. Trust me i would regularly read them. Because i am impressed by your thoughts. Thanks..