Hi there!
I liked the feel of the poem. Short and crisp with no beating around the bush. You have left a reasonable amount of gaps which is a key factor when one writes horror. It was an excellent use of the readers mind as they get to paint the blank areas with their own fears.
I have a few suggestions which I think would have been better, a few bits. Instead of cutting raw chicken, if you'd have used 'live', I think it would give it a more gory feel. Also the first paragraph could have been a bit stronger to be able to support the heights that the poem reaches as it progresses.
Great read on a Monday midnight. Keep writing!
Points: 427
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