"We got something.” Reid exclaimed as he and JJ walked into the LVPD.
“Same here.” Morgan said as he moved from the murder board towards the table behind him, and sat down.
“You first.” Reid said as he and JJ joined him at the table.
“Well we went to the Coroner’s office to get the lab results,” Morgan started as Hotch also made his way towards the table. “It’s exactly like the Hankel case.”
“Worse,” Hotch cut in. “If it weren’t for the fact that he’s dead, I would have even suggested it was the same Unsub. Likely even.”
“But it can’t be,” Reid interrupted. “Hankel’s dead. Hankel is dead.” He said more to himself than anyone else.
“I know,” Hotch reassured. “I’m just stating how similar our Unsub is to Hankel. It’s like he’s the same person.”
“Maybe a relative?” Morgan suggested.
“Same motive, same family, it’s a possibility.” JJ agreed. Just then Prentiss and Rossi walked into the department and headed towards the table. “What did you two find at the Harper’s?” She asked, motioning towards both Rossi and Prentiss as they sat down.
“Um, well…” Prentiss started.
“They aren’t exactly a cooperative family.” Rossi cut in.
“Yeah that’s a word for it.” Prentiss said.
“What do you mean?” Reid questioned.
“Well we couldn’t exactly get them to talk to us for more than five minutes at a time, before they started fighting with each other.” Prentiss continued.
“Not even mentioning if we asked about her son’s life and if he was involved in any criminal activity whatsoever.” Rossi exclaimed.
“Oh that was a riot. And then they asked us to leave.” Prentiss finished.
“So not good?” Moran joked.
“No.” Rossi simply replied. “So how about you guys.” He said motioning to both JJ and Reid.
“We actually found something useful.” JJ exclaimed as she grabbed the evidence bag and slid it to the middle of the table. “A file on the Hankel case.”
“He’s studying it?” Morgan asked.
“Actually,” Reid commented. “We think the Unsub left it there, as if to lead us to connect that case to this one, in case we hadn’t figured it out already.”
“So he wants us to know. How sick.” Morgan stated.
“Sick, but helpful.” Hotch concluded. “Emily, I want you and Morgan to look up any relatives of Hankel that might fit this profile. Everyone else get ready for the profile, JJ-”
“I’ll tell them that we’re ready” She said, already getting up from her chair and heading towards the chief’s office. Once she emerged and gave them a nod, they all headed towards the big conference room where they were to give the profile.
This is going to fun Reid sarcastically thought as he watch them all head towards the room as he hung back to have, yet again, another cup of coffee.
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Halo SpencerReidIsMyLife my name is jessiebear and I am going to do a review on your work. I do hope what I say is in any help to you. If it is rood will you pleas tell me and if it is rood I am very sorry about it.
Lets start with what I liked about the chapter.
What I liked.
This is a grate chapter it is even better then chapter 1 and chapter 2 so grate job, and what I liked all about this chapter is that you still pout a lot of emotions in to it so grate job again, and how you are all ways is trying to in kluged Reid in the convert sashes. I also loved the way you began the chapter.
Grammar.
The grammar is fantastic I do not see any thing wrong with it. so you did a grate job with that part of the chapter because I think grammar is very in portent. .
What needs to be fixt.
Okay lets start.
Okay in this chapter you don't have any description and I think it is very in portent to have description because then I no what are the surroundings are and it helps me see where you are and all of that stuff so you mite wont to work on that. That was just my opinion so you don't have to do it I was just saying.
Thins that need to be added.
Okay this is grate bout you need to ad a lot more into this chapter. You need to ad smell, sound and most in portend one in site. these are the ones that I can just think of at the moment but any way this is grate well done.
Any way I do hope you keep on weighting grate chapters, and I am looking for word to reading chapter 4 and doing a review on it for you, and I have ben noticing that on each chapter you get better at your weighting so well done you are in proving a lot.
So I do hope you have a grate day are night and I with you like with the story.
Alright! New chapter for me to read! Thanks for letting me know so soon.
So, the team have reconvened? You're really building the suspense...
This development of the killer definitely thickens the plot. I can't wait to read them giving the profile. I really want to know where you will take this!
I feel that the next chapter should have a bit more action and excitement, so that we get the plot going a little faster (but that's your call, obviously). Also, if the team have a good idea of who the murderer is, then the plot needs something else in order to hold the audience's attention. Think of all the twists they use in the telly show.
I think the only other nitpick I have is that you should look up how to punctuate dialogue. I won't be mean and explain it all again, but there are plenty of people 'round here who would be happy to help you with that.
I think that's my two cents' worth, because there wasn't too much to say...
Good work!
Until next chapter...
~Bella~
so....
There will definitely be some action next chapter! well, sort of. There will be a cliffhanger that will lead to some action, if you know what I mean *Wink, wink* Also, I'm thinking of adding one of my own characters, and I already have an idea formed in my head so I'm going to stop talking before I give anything else away.
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so yah, and I didn't proofread this because I just really wanted to get it out there, so that's probably where the grammar mistakes are, next one will be better!!! Ill try to upload it today!