Just as Little Red Riding Hood entered the wood, a wolf met her. Red Riding Hood did not know what a wicked creature he was, and was not at all afraid of him.
~Brothers Grimm
Ryder took a deep breath as she approached the run-down cabin on the edge of the woods. The dilapidated building looked close to collapsing in on itself. A majority of the windows were bashed in, leaving jagged glass outlines in the window frames, and the roof resembled more of an inverted half-circle than the erect triangle it should have been. The yard was strewn with rotting who-knew-what and soggy papers, and the tiny clumps of greenery struggling to survive gave off a sick yellow tinge. The trees from the nearby forest hung over the house ominously, as if their branches planned to snatch up the tiny structure and viciously devour it.
The place looked shady, no doubt about it.
But then again, Ryder’s world revolved in the shadows.
Her combat boots squelched in the mud as she made her way to the front door, which was, to no surprise, also warped and battered. Oddly, it was painted a dark crimson, which was peeling off in sections at a time. It didn’t have a ringer, door knocker, or even a knob, so she raised one gloved hand to knock. Before her knuckles could strike the wood, the door swung open. A young man lurked just within the shadows of what looked like an equally ruined household.
Ryder took a step back and observed her contact calmly. He was definitely taller than she’d imagined, his lean body towering over her small frame by such a degree that his dark, greasy hair nearly touched the top of the door frame. He was dressed for travel, with military boots, loose pants, a military field jacket, and a knapsack slung over one shoulder. His irises were a golden-green color, almost like that of a canine. He could have been attractive, if not for the harsh red scar that wound from beneath his right eye down to his jawline. Ryder raised an eyebrow. Must’ve been some fight.
The corners of his mouth quirked up as he stuck out a hand. His nails were long and sharp, curling towards his fingertips like claws.
“Ryder?” he inquired, his voice low and dark.
Ryder nodded and gripped his hand in a shake, then quickly shoved up his sleeve with her other. On his wrist was the tattoo of a crimson hooded cape, the symbol of Ryder’s organization. She relaxed, reassured of this man’s loyalties. The tattoo was extremely painful to receive, using the member’s own blood as the dye. Only those truly dedicated to the cause possessed one.
“Wolfe,” she said, pulling up her own sleeve to show him her identical tattoo.
He grinned, his sharp canines gleaming through the shadows.
“That’s me, ma’am. How may I assist you today?”
Ryder spun on her heel and began sliding back through the mud around the back of Wolfe’s cabin, towards the forest. A chill autumn breeze was in the air, and the sun was sending its last tendrils of red light over the horizon. They would have the cover of the night.
Ryder smirked when she heard Wolfe scrambling to follow her, knowing that she wasn’t one for patience. He seemed tough enough, but he also needed this job. The state of his house was enough evidence for that.
“You’re an assassin, aren’t you?” she asked, watching Wolfe finally fall into step beside her as they approached the forest line.
“Yes, ma’am.”
“I need you to take someone out.”
***
Wolfe adjusted his bag straps as Ryder explained his mission. The fog of the forest was so dense that Ryder could only tell Wolfe was still there by the glow of his yellow eyes.
“The target is a woman who happens to be my grandmother,” Ryder began flatly.
Wolfe’s eyes snapped up, surprise flashing across his features. Obviously, he was new to the fact that family feuds led to the most violence in the crime world. Or perhaps in any world.
“The apple never falls too far from the tree,” Ryder said, waving his concern away. A large cardinal flapped past, exploding out of the mist, seemingly from nowhere. Wolfe glared at the scarlet bird as it flew away, as if accusing it for his unfortunate line of work.
“She’s been taking advantage of me for years. Scamming me for weapons and such, growing her own business. Soon she’ll become serious competition. I need her gone.”
“It will be done,” Wolfe said softly. He hesitated before asking, “Do you have any preferences on how?”
Ryder pondered this for a minute. Her grandmother was no weakling. She wouldn’t go down without a fight, but Ryder wanted her to feel every bit of the pain that she had caused her granddaughter. She wanted it to be personal.
“I want her to know it was me,” Ryder said slowly, thinking. “My grandmother...she will pretend to be frail and innocent. Do not believe her. She will do anything to survive, and if she does, well...”
Wolfe nodded in understanding. Ryder’s eyes swept the marred side of his face, most likely caused by someone who refused to go peacefully into death. But Wolfe was still around, so he had to have succeeded in the end.
The word was, in fact, that he always succeeded. And that’s why he was here.
“Weapon choice?” Wolfe asked, shifting his knapsack.
“Knife or gun, really. Whichever you prefer.”
Wolfe smoothly pulled a thin handgun out of his waistband, then handed it to Ryder with the barrel facing himself. A sign of trust.
“Glock 17 alright? They’re very reliable.”
“Perfect.”
Ryder returned the weapon, and the two lapsed into silence. The only sounds were the pair’s heavy breathing in the humid air, and the howl of the wind filtering through the trees.
Soon, the two could see a Victorian house emerge from the gloom. The intricate decorations hung out over the darkened windows like jagged teeth. The red bricks had faded over time to a dull copper, making the house’s exterior eerily resemble the shade of dried blood. Which was what Ryder hoped would soon exist within the home, as well.
Her heart leaped in anticipation and giddiness. It was finally happening. She would remove her horrid relative from the living, once and for all. Wolfe would take her out, and she’d be free.
This was one of the best days of her life.
Wolfe paused, staring at the house, analyzing it. His yellow eyes failed to blink as he scanned every detail of the house, searching for signs of life.
“Does she have guards?” he asked quietly.
“She has two guarding her bedroom door, one patrols the bottom floor. I’d suggest the windows,” Ryder said with dark glee. “That window there leads to her room.” She pointed.
“Thank you,” he said, tucking the Glock back into his waistband. Checking that his bag was on tight, Wolfe then turned to look at Ryder. His scar shone pink in the dim moonlight, and his dark hair swept over his pale forehead.
“I’ll need payment before I go in. It’s my policy.”
Ryder grimaced, not pleased with this change in terms. “A full payment? I thought that the deal was half and half.”
“No money, no job.”
He was a stubborn one. Ryder could see in his eyes that he wasn’t going to back down, so she weighed the circumstances. Wolfe was known to be one of the best assassins, even if he was new. From how he had taken this job so professionally, she felt that she could trust him to carry it out.
And she wanted her grandmother dead, so very badly.
“Fine,” she snarled, digging in her own bag viciously. Pressing the gold coins in his hand so that the edges dug into his palm, Ryder watched, seething, as Wolfe calmly tucked them into a small cloth bag.
He began to turn to go towards the house, but Ryder stopped him by grabbing his shoulder. Wolfe turned, his eyes cold.
Ryder shoved a finger into his chest, and hissed, “You’ll kill her. If you take my money and let her live, I’ll find you. I’ll rip you apart.”
Wolfe tilted his chin and met her glare cooly, his golden eyes glinting in amusement. They stared at one another for a beat, and Wolfe parted his lips.
“Anything else, ma’am?” he whispered, his canines gleaming as a small smile spread over his face. His tongue ran over his teeth, slowly, deliberately.
Ryder took a step back, disgust flowering in her stomach. They were all the same. How foolish she had been to throw her money away like that. There were never guarantees in her line of work.
“Let her know I sent you. Let those words be the last thing she hears,” Ryder spat, turning her back on the young man. She stared into the dark forest as she commanded him, “Now, go.”
The whine of the wind through the dead branches of the forest was all that met her ears as she waited for his acknowledgement. When Ryder turned her head to demand what the fool was waiting around for now, she saw that Wolfe’s lean figure was still hovering nearby, his eyes wide and unblinking. Motionless.
A shudder ran down Ryder’s spine, and she whirled around, stepping away.
“What are you doing? Get in there!” she ordered, trying to hide the terror the young man had suddenly struck into her heart. Why was he still here? Why did he look like that?
His gaze was fixed on her like a ravenous dog.
Wolfe slowly swung his knapsack off of his shoulder, in no hurry at all. He untied the top and reached inside, his unearthly gaze never leaving her. His hand lifted from the bag, something long and thin clutched in his clawed fingers.
Ryder’s eyes widened in horror as she realized what the object was.
Wolfe’s mouth split into a grin, but it was far more sinister this time. He cocked his head as Ryder began to stumble backwards. The young man followed at an even, relaxed pace, amused by her fear.
“Yes. Your grandmother told me that she preferred the knife.”
Ryder froze, panic slashing through her chest, her mind seeming to move like molasses. “My grandmother?” she spluttered furiously. “But...but I hired you!”
“Yes,” Wolfe purred, stroking the blade as he continued to creep forward. Soon he was close enough that his warm breath brushed Ryder’s collarbone. “But so did she.”
Ryder’s back hit the trunk of a thick tree with a jolt. Her breaths exploded from her mouth in ragged gasps. She was trapped.
“It’s funny how things work out sometimes,” Wolfe said, delicately pressing the knife’s edge against Ryder’s throat. “I’ll just kill you both, I suppose.”
Ryder swallowed painfully, mind whirring. Her hand crept to her own knife sheath at her hip. Maybe she could get Wolfe in the armpit, down him so she could run away...
But as she raised her own weapon, Wolfe bashed her wrist against the tree trunk, and her only hope of salvation dropped to the forest floor. And the sudden movement forced the blade at her throat to dig in, ever so slightly...
Ryder choked out a cry of pain as warm blood inched its way down her neck, the pain searing to her temples. Wolfe tilted his head, his golden eyes boring into her skull. With his free hand, he brushed his fingertips over her skin, over her blood.
Ryder’s eyes fluttered closed with panic and disgust when he licked the crimson from his hand, the red shining bright on his lips. All Ryder could see was red. His red tattoo, a mockery of loyalty she had trusted. His red lips, lapping up her lifeblood. The red Victorian house, where her enemy was probably watching her failure at this moment.
And lastly, Wolfe’s red-tinged scar that seemed to mock her in the pale moonlight. He may have managed to escape death once, but oh, she would not.
Ryder felt her throat constricting, her limbs weakening. This was it. All of her work, for nothing.
Wolfe smiled one last time, and tightened his grip on the handle of the knife.
“Who’s afraid of the big bad Wolfe?”
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greenery struggling to survive gave off a sick yellow tinge.
this i think should have a comma survive, gave.
own blood as the dye.
very cool and unique.
And that’s why he was here.
i think this should be she.
I think it is intersting that you chose gold coins, what time period/ is this a made up world.
I would have taken a completely different angle to this, but this is really good very intersting and i definatly didnt expect the twist. it was great you really should finish it!!
Thanks for the review!
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I'm not sure what time period I was thinking. I was thinking that it took place in more of a noir fantasy period, but I'm not sure. XD
Thanks again!
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Yeah thanks!
Sup! I'm a little new to this reviewing thing so forgive me is some of my points are misguided
First, I will start off with the negatives, of which there are very few (good on you!). The only problems were that you mention Wolfe's canines gleaming twice, and both written pretty similarly. Secondly after they talk about the pistol you mention that they stop walking, but forget to mention they they resuming their walk.
All in all, this was bloody fantastic. I do admit I have a bit of a weak spot for reworked fairy tails, and you hit the nail on the head! Very, very well written, so keep it up!
Thanks!
Hey night, I'm finally heeeeere to review as I promised. So let's get started!!

Well, I really liked this. The color of red being a focus was quite blatantly obvious, without overdosing the reader into getting annoyed by it, so well done there! Your description was really good as usual and you made the feelings of the characters come alive as well. Wolfe was described very well. I don't have many nitpicks but here are a few:
You mention Wolfe's canines gleaning. Twice. Written almost exactly the same way. I would try to readjust the sentence structure so that the second time you get the same feeling without it being redundant. Also, right after they talk about the pistol you say they were silent but you also mentioned they had stopped walking. You then DO NOT mention them resuming their walk, but you say that the house came into their view, making it sound as if the house were moving!! O.o A simple addition of something like "They moved on in silence" would clear that up!
I would like to state that as a personal feeling I don't understand Wolfe's motives. If he got hired by the grandma, why not just straight up kill Ryder when she comes to the door. I mean he knows she has money to so why even go along with the job at all? For that matter, why didn't he kill the grandma as well? I know it might be super picky, but I felt like it was there for the sake of a plot twist. Maybe not, but I didn't feel a connection to him killing them.
Overall very well done!
Hope this helps!!
~Messy
Thanks dude I'll look into that.
Hello there!
I really liked this story! It was dark, gritty and had a crazy killer!! It was perfect!!
And I absolutely loved Wolfe!!
Great job!
Thanks!
Interesting. Very much so.
You took the story of Little Red Riding Hood and then added a modern, dark touch to it. And once the reader, or at least me, is done reading, the first sentence makes a lot of sense.
As for mistakes/nitpicks/preferences, I really can't see any mistakes. It's a well-made, well-thought out story. As for preferences, hybrid stories are not really what I aim to read, but every once in a while I find a good one. Yours, for example.
Anyway, keep writing!
Thanks, Elder. I tried something new with this.
Greetings nightcrawler! Le Wandering Wizard here for a midnight review!

Well, what can I say? WOW!! This piece was absolutely amazing! From the descriptions of the cabin, to the last moments of with the blade against Ryder's neck. Absolutely breath taking!!
This is probably the best retake on this classic fairy tale ever. From the fact that Ryder is hiring the Wolf, and the fact that she wants her grandmother dead, to the excellent plot twist that Grandmother hired the Wolf herself to kill Ryder. This piece was absolutely thrilling.
You are a master at suspense and originality, and I applaud you for that!
Also, that ending! One sentence. One sentence which ends this tale one such a cliffhanger, I nearly fell off the ledge because of it. What happens next?? Doe Ryder somehow escape? Or does the Woodcutter come to her rescue just in time? Or, even more unexpected, is this just some sick test of Wolfe's to sum up his patron? You left me with so many unanswered questions...
Overall, this is a masterpiece!! I therefore rate it 10 out of ten!! The third person to ever receive this reward, two of which (including yours now) happened the past two days!! My word...
Absolutely in love with your writing prowess,
The Wandering Wizard
Thank you for the review!
It was a pleasure! And please notify me if you are going to publish another SS. I went and read a few of your others, and I like your work!! Please keep me posted. *vanishes in a cloud of grey smoke*
I'll be sure to let you know.
Hey,
First things first, I love fairy tale rewrites and this one was exceptional. I really liked the way you kept the plot but twisted it into something original. Instead of the morals being about following orders it became about revenge and in my mind, much more relevant to today's audience. Furthermore I enjoyed all of the red that you put in the story from the bird to the blood and everything in between. It became very thematic.
One suggestion. I would change the wolf's name just as you changed little Red Ridding Hood's. You have a lot of descriptions and allusions that make it fairly obvious that he is the wolf in the story. To my mind, naming him Wolfe becomes a little redundant. I would suggest Rafe, Ralph or Seff; all of which mean wolf. In the end though, it is your call and I think whatever you do will be great.
I really enjoyed this story. Keep it up.
Write on.
Thanks for the review and suggestion! This story was actually written for a contest in which the theme was "red". I'm glad you spotted it. Thanks again!