It is amazing how in the very first verse you were able to set the mood in my mind. Quiet. This poem IS very realistic, minus the "Everything is dead in every way" verse. We got our first day of winter today out where I live, and I loved it. I love how an overcast winter sky full of snow clouds makes everything looks so grey. I would suggest that you go into more detail with color. You've already got the sound and feeling of winter, just describe the color and this poem might be perfect. Does "Just know these winter days Shall not remain" mean that the seasons change? That verse is not incredibly clear to me. I really do like what you are doing with this poem, I feel like it could be slightly expanded. Asides from that, Great work! Keep it up!
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