16+ Violence Mature Content

Let Me Go

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The days have gone dark

I no longer feel

That I have a heart

My head reels

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My vision has disappeared

Things have gotten worse

This is what I feared

I am falling back

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Back to where I was before

In this deep, dark hole

It is like I am keeping score

With the demons I keep inside

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Inside my brain

That nobody understands

I try to stop the pain

With the cuts on my hands

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My tears fall

It constantly rains

I used to have it all

Now I am nothing

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Nobody cares

It's a dark world

Full of selfishness

If only someone cared

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If someone cared

Maybe I would still have my hair

Maybe I would not be scarred

Maybe I would have a heart

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I no longer feel emotion

Or have any devotion

To anyone in my life

They didn't care

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My vision is back

I have made my decision

Once I let go

There's no turning back

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Let Me Go

I will feel no pain

There will be no loss

There will be no gain

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Nobody listened when I spoke

It was all an exaggeration

I wanted to die as soon as I woke

But I am just exaggerating

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My exaggeration is my reality

The reality that nobody sees

But me

I am done living in my reality

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I finally let go

Of the pain

Of the memories

Of the girl who was once happy

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The day is black

The day is gloomy

Everyone finally understands now

But I am not coming back

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brookeallo
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I feel this poem so much. it's really powerful. I would say that at some points in the poem I didn't like how the stanzas would separate. There were a few things that didn't make since. Like in one line it went," With the cuts on my hands," and I felt like maybe you ment like arms instead of hands or maybe you meant hands I'm not 100 percent sure if that wasn't just a
mistype. Another thing is that the poem repeated they didn't care alot and I think if you took that repeated phrase out it would flow better. Other than that I loved the poem and especially the last line which was so powerful. Thanks for writing. I hope to be able to read and review more from you soon.

Thank you so much! And I did mean hands when I wrote it. If you think about it from the deeper perspective, a cut in your hand is much easier to explain. The repetition was intentionally and it was meant to disrupt the flow, to make those that are reading think. Thank you so much for your review!

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looseleaf
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I must say, this is one of the best poems I have ever read, ever. You portray the harsh reality of depression well in this poem. The way you formatted it and how you never have more than four rows in each section, it looks very clean and nice. Your grammar and punctuation is wonderful, there wasn't any punctuation so I can't say anything on that. This is one of the poems where it flows better without punctuation. Keep on writing and Merry (early) Christmas!

Thank you so much for your review!!



"Of course it is happening inside your head, Harry, but why on earth should that mean that it is not real?"
— Albus Dumbledore