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Vent it out! wooow the last part of the poem hits hard you know. I love it, i love it, i love it.I do not play games

"Because I do not like to lose

I am not your toy

And my heart is not a game. "
this line is stuck in my head forever, i mean it. Can we get more of these vent poems please? I'm awed and impressed.

This... is so relatable. The title was so powerful, and an instant click. I feel like you captured that emotion that so many people go through and fed that feeling into every single line. The last four lines are so strong, and emanate the energy of the lesson you learn after having your heart broken in this way.

Vent poetry is seriously my favorite kind of poetry. Your feelings are so raw and potent.

"I do not play games, Because I do not like to lose" Honestly my favorite line, I definitely said something similar at some point when I went through a situation like this. It is an anthem for broken hearts.

The only thing I would change is maybe have more punctuation, but that's probably just stylistic preference. I'm more partial to feelings that a piece possesses, and yours possesses enough to have a life of it's own. Great piece!

First of all your tittle gave me the chills, automatic click. I love how you are using something as playful as writing to get you point across to all of those jerk lovers.

Love isn't a game and yet boys intend on playing it.

LADIES DON'T LET MEN DO THIS TO YOU!!! (Girl just know there is always someone to talk to).

1,000,000,000,000 out of 5!!! 👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👏🏼👏🏼👏🏼

You have got a talent!

It's amazing how we all at some point experience the same turmoils. Reading this assured me that we are not as alone as we think. This was beautiful and I hope you find that person who will put you first and love you the way we all deserve to be loved.

I loved the poem and I felt the emotions cause I have gone through something similiar. It's really good and has a good rhyme scheme/flow to it. I would say that if u stayed viewing it as something from the past it might help the flow other than going from past to present randomly. The last part could have been phrased so that game wasn't repeated twice cause it kind of takes away the powerful effect from the last line.

OMG! this is so inspiring! I wish you'd sing this like a song!!! It is so relatable to me right now. Amazing Job! Please keep writing. Will you tag me the next time you post your work?

Hey!

I'd love to review this. It's pretty interesting and a good read! I hope I'm not too critical in my review.
Starting off, I like the beginning. It's to the point. However, I think adding full stops at the end of each stanza would allowed for a neater look and read. Other punctuation can be used too; depending on the line, improvements could be made here and there. Of course, no punctuation is a style of writing as well.
The second stanza has good meaning, but the simple fact that it doesn't follow the rule you've set for the rest of the poem (the four lines per stanza thing) breaks the rhythm and become a mild discontinuity. And maybe the rhyme could be something else, like "lurk". It may sound nicer.

Loving the third stanza.
The fourth, in my opinion, is rather unnecessary. I feel like your poem, despite already having depth, would have even more power if there was more ambiguity.

Stanzas six and eight clash with each other slightly.

I absolutely love the last verse. Brilliant wordplay on that one.
I hope i wasn't too critical! If so, I'm sorry. Just trying to help!

I like this poem. It's a good blend of emotions. And besides, it's relatable, which is a very important quality to have in a poem.

Good work! Hope to see more from you soon!

I love this it shows how you really cared about someone and played you. I have nothing to complain about. Good job.

I Enjoyed this poem a lot. I have never been in a relationship, but I can imagine how tough it can be, falling for an asshole. This is the first time I have seen this pain put into words and you did it very well. You can write amazingly and the way you made it so simple to read was wonderful. The grammar, punctuation, and spelling, was great. You didn't change subjects or topics throughout the poem, which was awesome. Keep on writing. Merry (early) Christmas!