*wrote this out of no where, kinda suckish... tell me what title you liked better*
I'm moving on,
new town, new place.
no matter where i look
ill always see his face
my misery
was his only goal
i don't know how many times
I've been told
They'll always want
to mess with your head
telling you
this is until the end
where did i go wrong?
where did love go wrong
let me sing my sappy love song
i thought you were
being true
you messed it up
what did i do?
i thought you meant
me and you.
were meant to be.
i was wrong
and i know now
what they say is true
They'll always want
to mess with your head
telling you
this is until the end
where did i go wrong?
where did love go wrong
let me sing my sappy love song
Oh
let me fall
just let me go
break down the walls
i worked so hard to build
my courage, understanding, faith...
love
now I know its true!
They'll always want
to mess with your head
telling you
this is until the end
where did i go wrong?
where did love go wrong
let me sing my sappy love song
x3
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I agree with Snoink about the one verse that talked about the past. Perhaps you could instead incorporate the future? How, it would be so much better. Anyways, I loved the chorus, I found it to be sweet and a little sassy. It worked. Also I like the title Sappy Love Song better that Mess with your Head. It just has a little more punch, like I would remember it better.
Hey mixed!
So! Your first verse was all about moving on and then you started talking about the past, so it seemed like you weren't talking about moving on at all! So you may want to switch the moving on bit to the very end... or use it for another song.
Just a thought!