How do i let go,
when i know i will fall.
How do i let go,
when you had it all.
How do i let go
when i cant even think.
How do i let go
When i see your heart sink
I knew it was to good to be true
You never think of me
like you used to
We used to be right,
but some how we went wrong.
I don't even think you've noticed
or do you even care?
How do i let go,
when i know i will fall.
How do i let go,
when you had it all.
How do i let go when
i cant even think.
How do i let go
When i see your heart sink
I know you still love me
its obvious you do
I have the feeling
i may love you to
But things aren't going well
My heart drops
as the tears swell
How do i let go,
when i know i will fall.
How do i let go,
when you had it all.
How do i let go when
i cant even think.
How do i let go
When i see your heart sink
We used to be so good
and we used to be so happy
i don't think I'm understood
I cant let go
its just so hard
to make us last
i feel like a retard
Just let me go
when you know i will fall.
Just let me go
when we had it all.
Just let me go
even if i cant think.
Just let me go
don't let your heart sink
We have to let go
Even if i fall
We have to let go
When we had it all
We have to let go
Give me time to think
Just let me go
But don't let your heart sink.
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I really liked the emotion that you portrayed in this song. It could be a great slow pop song. Or it could be fast, whichever way you feel like it. The only problem I had with the lyrics was the line "I feel like a retard." I felt this line came out of left field. All the lines were very poetic and flow with lots of emotion, and then you add the retard line. I suggest you search for a different sort of way of saying that. I thing it would make the song flow much better. Besides that, nice job I loved the lines "My heart drops as the tears swell." I think it sums up nicely how you must be feeling. Good job!
Hello there, All!
- shouldn't it be "too"?One thing:
Anyways, I like the concept of it, it was really good. It was easy to understand the feelings and emotions throughout, of the lyric.
Keep writing!
Peace out!