No one can hear the silent screams
They fill my head for you
They want me to say something
but i cant talk to you
Ive never felt this way
I want to run away
To where my silent screams
are heard
I saw you look at me
and it made my heart flutter.
I talked to you
and i could help but stutter
Your hand took mine
And my breathing stopped
Why did you let go
Now...
No one can hear the silent screams
They fill my head for you
They want me to say something
but i cant talk to you
Ive never felt this way
I want to run away
To where my silent screams
are heard
You asked me out
and my heart missed a beat
You made me feel special and unique
I felt important
in someones eye
Now when i see
you i want to cry
now...
No one can hear the silent screams
They fill my head for you
They want me to say something
but i cant talk to you
Ive never felt this way
I want to run away
To where my silent screams
are heard
You treat me like I'm just your friend
When will this ever end?
I told you i loved you
And damn i meant it
I gave you my heart
but you bent it.
I miss the way it used to be
Now...
No one can hear the silent screams
They fill my head for you
They want me to say something
but i cant talk to you
Ive never felt this way
I want to run away
To where my silent screams
are heard
I don't feel special
I don't feel unique
around you my heart feels weak
Why don't you realize
what your doing to me
Just let go
let me be free
Now....
No one can hear the silent screams
They fill my head for you
They want me to say something
but i cant talk to you
Ive never felt this way
I want to run away
To where my silent screams
are heard
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Hey allmixedup!
First of all, there's a couple of typos in here that you can fix! For instance, "stutter" is spelled as "studder" and other typos. So just run this through a spell checker!
As far as lyrics go, I seem to think of this as a slow metal song. Why? I have no idea. But it seems to fit. I would like to see a verse that goes into why they split. That way, we can see whether the silent screaming is really valid. But that's just me.
Hello there, Allmixedup!
You used "bent" (a little awkward to say it)... It's okay but maybe "break" can be better.I liked this. The way you expressed "Silent scream" is very unique and kind of showing the dark side and slightly emotional. I'm thinking this could be accompanied with a rock guitar or anything with a hard-core music.
Aside from that, it's really nice!
Keep up the good work!
Peace out!
I like it and if this love is really real you should show her this song.
First off, I think this piece has real potential. I think it is awesome now but could be even better with a little bit of work. First there are just some mechanics issues. You really hould use apostrophes (') in your contractions (can't, don't, ect.) You might try separating and labeling it into VERSE 1, 2, 3, ect. and CHORUS. Then there are some wording problems "I could help but studder" Did you mean "I couldn't help but stutter"? The part "You asked me out, and my heart missed a beat" sounds off to me. I don't know why and I don't really have any suggestions for it but it is something you might want to think about. Overall though, they are good lyrics. There is no mistaking what you are feeling. Keep on writing.
-Jem