Greetings from a fellow writing friend!
Kaia here to spin by and give you a review.
So here we have another one of Rinisha's infamous death fables. Okay, just joking. (But there really does seem to be a trend here featuring the end of life and the meaning found in life and eternity and the works one has done in life and well I could just keep going on, now couldn't I?) But let's get on with it, shall we?
So, I have to say I was quite surprised when I saw that the man had only a few stones surrounding the place where his heavenly home was supposed to be. But then it started to make sense to me (I think). What I got from this is that the man had the good deeds, but not the gratitude and determination to be thankful that he needed to put the bricks he had earned through good deeds into the formation of a house. I guess I never quite thought of those two things being related before--thankfulness and good deeds. But, the two should not be separated for sure. And it's also very relatable because so often people focus on trying to improve on one little element in their lives that they lose sight of the rest of the important things in life--in this case, gratitude.
I really liked your idea stated here about the fact that every good deed is a building block for your future home in heaven. I had always thought of it like God prepared the place for you in heaven, but this short story puts a wonderful spin on that. You provide the bricks by doing all the good works, and God will build the wonderful home for you. Wow! I really love that! That's really creative, and it does definitely remind me of the goal to get to heaven.
About the plot...I have to say I'm really glad that Caleb got a second chance. I think he did deserve it. After all, he was TRYING to do good, right? But his aim was off just a bit. And there have been true stories about people having near-death experiences and meeting God (or usually just hearing His voice) and then returning to the Earth with a message to be shared among God's people. So, in reality, that's even realistic.
Overall, fantastic job, Rinisha! I can't believe I missed when this one was first released. I really like your short fables. They're so quick but there's so much depth to them; it's awesome!
Keep up the great work, and have a great review day!