too good
very much too good.
I don't have much to say except compliments if you don't mind ;_;
How does he keep from screaming?
Does he save the tears for the dressing room,
Safe from prying eyes and flashing bulbs?
First of all, I'll have to say that your exaggeration here is perfect. Throughout the poem, the exaggeration shows the frustration and calm contempt of the author. "Tears for the dressing room" was a good touch. This part starts off with "How does he keep from screaming?" which really gets the reader's attention.
And sagging, shoulders droop with the weight
Of forced laughs and helpless shrugs.
Here, you begin to push in the sympathy for the subject, which is nice.
Two hours of playing the jester to a pair of fools
Who take themselves to be kings,
Normally, in a poem like this, I wouldn't put a metaphor like this, but this metaphor is perfect.
One can only imagine how a man does not abandon God
And flee broken into the dark.
And there, you have created the biggest exaggeration of all. Absolutely perfect. Although you make it sound like Chris Wallace is getting tortured. (Well, I guess moderating the presidential debates ARE torture-ish)
AND before I forget--
I love how you fill the spaces between each stanza.
Each one is a quote from Chris Wallace at the presidential debates (I watched both of them) and also gives the reader a bit of a background.
Anyways, this is an awesome poem! it is very much too good. it is the truth.
Bon Voyage!
-y0sH!
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