After reading your poem I can say that you have a very creative poetic voice.
From the words you use to the way you describe the environment, everything feels personal, yet objective. You did a great job weighing the scene with emotions - almost as if emotions were part of the scene themselves.
In that regard I especially LOVED the second verse. Their position, the notion of time, the begining grief : you depicted it very well!
I also liked the ending, on a detail. You succeeded in transforming the painting into a poem, congrats!
Maybe you could work on the structure your sentences. Sometimes I had trouble reading, because the sentences dragged on when I thought they would end. You did better on the last verse, it was much clearer.
You did a very good job!! Thank you
Points: 1976
Reviews: 18
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