Undetermined

soo...much....poetry....reviewing....

Please don't ever call your works-in-the-making stupid...every work has potential and every masterpiece has improvement to be done!

I think your message is pretty clear throughout this.
A few questions: is Undetermined your title, or specifying that the title is, in fact, undetermined? XD did that make sense?
And also is your ending there on the last line or is it meant to keep going? I noticed the comma ending it.

The only parts I don't understand are, well, most of the capitalized words. XD but that's probably due to my own lack of knowledge.

I think it's really beautifully written so far. Once it's finished it will become clear and you'll feel better about it. Just hang in there!

Did I help? I probably just made things more confusing, knowing myself.

Keep it up!

Hey,
This is a great poem with a lot of potential! Poetry should never be deleted as it is full of possibility's! I like this poem because it is well composed and has the steady flow of a poem. Please keep in mind that poems do not have to be long, and they do not always have to rhyme. Small tweaks that could be made however are mostly punctuation. You ended you poem with a comma "Stellas eyes," instead of a period. Im also curious about "Chiefe," as well as "Worke," All in all Grammar and punctuation need some work but otherwise great poem!
Sincerely,
Collideascope

This is written very well, and it also has very great meaning behind it.
It was at times a little confusing though, but there is good word choice
I myself love writing and love that you chose to write about this
You seem like a very interesting person, and I love that you decided to voice your passion for writing.
There are a few things other people said that I do not want to reiterate, so I won't
Although there are a few corrections that could make this even better you have great potential,and ideas
Have a great day!

What was this about?

Sorry,
Hello RainbowPowerPonies,
TheShauzer here reviewing.

Um... This poem really confused me.
I'm not quite sure what it was all about, obviously. There is no rhythm - I don't care about rhyming scheme but there absolutely must be rhythm. Your punctuation is all over the shot - why did you end it on a comma? - and... Well to be honest I just have no interest. You didn't decorate the piece - by way of vocabulary. You used lines that either made no sense or maybe a different kind of sense that my mind can't pick up on, for example,

"Waiting for a fix
Farewell and adieu to you noble hearties, --
This day, whate'er the Fates decree,"

What? There's just no explanation here, I don't know what is happening. I nkow the purpose of this isn't to baffle me but that is all it does. Honestly I'd just love to know what it's about. It could be brilliant but I don't know. See that's the biggest thing I can tell you after reading this. You can make poems vague, make them mysterious so that we have to think about them. But - 1. Don't stray too far into your own mind while writing because your readers don't know what you're raving on about. 2. Use your vocab not just to decorate but to strengthen! 3. This is really weird, I can't understand why you ended on a comma. It's like you copy and pasted this from one of Shakespeare's worse pieces. I'm sorry if I offended, this just confuses me and I'm trying to help. If this is based on some extract I've never read or movie I haven't seen, please say such things in the description.

Hope I offered some good advice, and that you take it,
Yours in ink,
TS.