Hey, ILUVBUNNIES08 here for a review!
First off, I love this title it caught my eye while I was scrolling through the shorts page looking for something to review.
Second, I love how in-depth you went with the description of the homes. "a crimson-red house near the mountains. Unlike all the beige houses with broken roofs and all the grey houses."
Third, I love how this shows a character in its true teen years, not some made-up crap that people like to show teens as in movies or whatever.
Fourth, I could envision everything you talked about in paragraph two. “I lived with my grandparents in a crimson-red house near the mountains. Unlike all the beige houses with broken roofs and all the grey houses, our house was special. It was strong and sturdy with shiny windows. We stood out from all the houses in the mountains and it looked pretty too.”
Fifth, I was left on a cliffhanger when you stopped the story. I have so many questions that were never answered by the end of the story.
I wish I could give you more praise on this but there was not much to go off of overall this was an amazing story so please continue writing.
Love. ILUVBUNNIES08
Points: 68
Reviews: 4
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