Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Harry....here to leave a review on this short...err...flash fiction...never quite figured out the difference between the two.
First Impression: Well...this sounds like a pretty tidy little scene that you've got here. It is promising quite few things with that entrance. I loved that last line that you had. Anyways let me get into a few more specific details, shall we.
Anyway let's get right to it,
As the nights grow cold and many prepare for winter, a new festive solstice begins.
This time, it’s the star solstice.
Hmm...is that a real one or did you make that up? I have heard of a summer solstice and a winter solstice but not this one.
“Lotus, Please serve the main course for today.”
Mama Divine’s voice echoed in the room, creating a false sense of safety.
Well Lotus, that's quite a name...
A crimson-blood red cloth was draped over the table with several glasses of clear white wine. Lotus placed the whole plate of heirloom tomatoes, crucian carp, and wild rice.
That's a pretty good description there. Also I'm hungry now...I wonder why.
Each person of the family brought their glasses down and started serving themselves.
But soon, the anti-divines would arrive.
Well definitely setting up what promises to be a pretty fun scene to come up. So far it sounds like its shaping up to be a pretty good scene.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall this sounds like the start of a pretty nice story. I can sense some worldbuilding in there and it didn't have any mistakes or anything that felt off to me so you've done a pretty good job there. I might just read any other parts you post of this.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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