Mailice here with a short review!
So, I have the impression that we have a big difference between the sections here, almost as if you have painted a picture that describes joy and happiness, but you have used gloomy and sad colours. At least it leaves me with the bland taste of a kind of fairy tale that fizzles out as soon as you think about it too much.
In terms of writing style, I think you build up a very poetic tone. It seems very well constructed in many places and reads very smoothly and evenly in parts, as if you were a ball rolling from one side of the scale to the next. In the second section in particular, I think it stands out because you always use an "and" to lengthen the sentences, which gives the effect of going from one line to the next in a poem.
Your introduction is good as it is, with a partly very mysterious and philosophical tone. It makes me think that you have taken two basic points and reversed them. It gives the introduction a good way into the story, especially to allow the reader to settle in and let their imagination run wild.
With the third section, everything seems to go in a different direction. It doesn't seem so poetic and dreamy anymore, but realistic, almost as if the house of cards you've built up has collapsed. It gave me this feeling of being down, of waking up after a beautiful dream, only to know that the bland aftertaste is that the more you think about it, the paler the memory becomes.
But at the same time, I had the impression that it was a kind of "new morning", where you give hope a new chance and through that you give some kind of happiness along the way.
In summary, it was visibly a short and wonderful story with a very nice tone and great build-up!
Other points I noticed while reading:
The moon is an island and it is a lonely place to be.
I think it would be appropriate here if you took away the "it is", because it seems a bit strange from the reading flow, and then you help the poetic sound. That way you have the same number of syllables before and after the "and".
The waves lap against her pale shores and at times completely wash over her, until there is nothing but a roiling dark surface where she used to shine.
I don't know why, but this sentence has stuck in my mind the most, especially how you manage to describe something so natural in such beautiful words.
Have fun writing!